List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and coherence: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, arguably), correct grammar (e.g., ‘I need to’ -> ‘I need to’, ‘meal prep pretty much every week’ -> ‘I meal-prep every week’), and keep to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific example of what you include on the shopping list to make the answer concrete. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘so’ appropriately.

예시: Yes, I always make a shopping list. I do this because eating out in Australia is expensive, so I meal-prep every week to save money. For example, my list usually includes chicken breast, rice, frozen vegetables and spices for three different dinners. This helps me avoid buying unnecessary items.

제안: Good structure and useful detail, but reduce repetition and refine vocabulary: avoid repeating ‘list’ and phrases like ‘basically’. Use linking words (first, then, finally) to organise steps clearly and give one concrete example of how time-blocking helped you. Keep to 3–4 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I make work lists and they are effective. First, I write down all tasks, then I prioritise them by urgency and importance, and finally I use time-blocking to schedule focused periods. For example, during a busy week I reserved two hours each morning for project A, which helped me meet the deadline.

제안: Clarify main idea and provide specific reasons: begin with a direct topic sentence explaining reasons (e.g., dislike of lists because of spontaneity or feeling constrained). Remove unclear phrases (‘different miles’) and fillers. Offer 1–2 specific reasons with brief examples and use linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘because’.

예시: Some people dislike making lists because they find them restrictive and prefer to be spontaneous. For example, creative people may feel a list limits their flexibility, and others may dislike the time it takes to organise tasks. As a result, they rely on memory or ad-hoc decisions instead.

제안: Make a clear comparison and correct contradictions: start with your preference, state reasons for both options, and avoid contradictory phrasing (‘more convenient, if less superior’). Use comparative language (whereas, however) and give a short example of when you use paper versus phone. Keep to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: I prefer making lists on paper because I can quickly draw diagrams and jot random notes. However, my phone is more convenient for shopping lists since I can update items on the go and set reminders. For instance, I use paper for meal-planning sketches but use my phone for the supermarket list.

× ...because eating out in Australia can be quite costly and need to do a meal prep pretty much every week.

✓ ...because eating out in Australia can be quite costly and I need to do meal prep pretty much every week.

The original sentence lacks a subject for the verb 'need', causing a grammatical error. In context the speaker refers to themselves, so add the subject 'I' to form the correct present-tense clause 'I need to do meal prep'. Maintain present tense because the statement describes a habitual action. Also remove the article 'a' before 'meal prep' because 'meal prep' is an uncountable activity here.

× And you need to come up with some new and umm, arguably innovative ideas with new test meals plans.

✓ You need to come up with some new, arguably innovative ideas for new meal plans.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and an unnecessary word 'test' that seems incorrect. 'Ideas with new test meals plans' is ungrammatical. Use the preposition 'for' to indicate purpose ('ideas for new meal plans'), place the adverb 'arguably' correctly before 'innovative', and remove 'test' unless intended. Also combine adjectives using a comma for clarity.

× So what I tend to do is basically list all the things out and then list it by the urgency and the importance and then time blocking, shuffle things around to fit things in.

✓ So what I tend to do is basically list all the things out, then order them by urgency and importance, and do time blocking to shuffle things around to fit them in.

The original mixes forms ('list it by the urgency and the importance and then time blocking, shuffle...') producing a nonparallel and unclear structure. Use parallel verb forms: 'order' to match 'list', and 'do time blocking' as a verb phrase. Replace 'fit things in' with 'fit them in' to keep pronoun reference consistent. This yields a clear, grammatical sequence of actions.

× I think it is, umm, how different miles work a bit differently, right?

✓ I think it is how different minds work a bit differently, right?

The word 'miles' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'minds'. Using the incorrect noun creates a semantic and grammatical error. Replace with 'minds' to convey the intended meaning. Additionally, extra commas are unnecessary; keep the clause fluid.

× It's just like, uh, some people don't like one thing, but other people claim that it's the best thing in the world.

✓ It's just that some people don't like a thing, while others claim it's the best thing in the world.

The original is mostly understandable but contains informal fillers and an awkward contrast construction 'don't like one thing, but other people'. Use 'just that' for clarity and 'while others' to present a smoother contrast. 'A thing' is preferable to 'one thing' in this context.

× I think because we have been through maybe 10 or 12 years of schooling and four years of university, everyone kind of figures things out by then.

✓ I think because we have been through maybe 10 or 12 years of schooling and four years of university, everyone kind of figures things out by then.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as it stands: present perfect 'have been through' and present simple 'figures' are used to express a general truth. No correction required. Included for completeness; no change needed.

× I think making a list on the phone, even though it's a bit more convenient, if less superior compared to making lists on the paper because you have the ability to draw and and put in some random notes as you go, whereas on the phone you are more limited to typing.

✓ I think making a list on the phone, even though it's a bit more convenient, is less suitable compared to making lists on paper because you have the ability to draw and put in some random notes as you go, whereas on the phone you are more limited to typing.

Multiple issues: 'if less superior' is incorrect; use 'is less suitable' or 'is inferior' to express comparison. Article use: 'on the paper' should be 'on paper' (generic noun usage without 'the'). Remove the duplicated 'and and'. Also 'making a list on the phone' is stated as convenient then called less suitable; keep the contrast clear with 'even though ... it is less suitable'. These changes correct articles, redundancy, and comparative phrasing.