Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating similar ideas and improve sentence structure for better flow. For example, instead of saying "I think library is a good place to help me get focused and finish my homework, and I become very efficient during the library," you could say "I find the library a quiet place that helps me concentrate and complete my homework efficiently."

예시: Yes, I go to the library almost every day during the semester because I find it a quiet place that helps me concentrate and complete my homework efficiently.

제안: Your answer covers the question well but could be improved by using more precise grammar and linking words to enhance coherence. For example, replace "using the computer system" with "use the library's computer system" and connect ideas with linking words like "Additionally" or "Sometimes."

예시: Most of the time, I go to the library for self-study. I either do my homework or use the library's computer system to find additional resources. Additionally, sometimes I rent a group study room to discuss assignments with my friends.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, avoiding filler words like "umm." Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I didn't go to the library very often when I was a kid, which I now regret. As I grew older, I realised that reading outside of class provides valuable knowledge and information.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some unclear phrases and grammatical errors. For example, "wide rating" is unclear. Try to use clearer vocabulary and structure your answer with linking words to contrast different situations.

예시: It depends on the family. Some parents place great importance on reading and encourage their children to visit the library regularly. However, others prefer their children to spend time playing or visiting relatives instead.

× I think library is a good place to help me get focused and finish my homework, and I become very efficient during the library.

✓ I think the library is a good place to help me get focused and finish my homework, and I become very efficient during my time in the library.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'during the library' is incorrect; it should specify 'during my time in the library' to clarify the meaning.

× That is I either do my homework or using the computer system in the library to find more resources.

✓ That is, I either do my homework or use the computer system in the library to find more resources.

After 'either...or', parallel verb forms are required. 'Do' and 'use' should both be in base form. 'Using' is incorrect here because it breaks the parallel structure.

× And sometimes I will have the group study in the library.

✓ And sometimes I will have group study in the library.

The phrase 'group study' is a general activity and does not require the definite article 'the' before it.

× We will rent a group study room and talk about the work with my friends.

✓ We will rent a group study room and talk about the work with my friends.

This sentence is correct; no preposition errors detected.

× That is also a pity for me because when I was a kid I didn't read that much, which umm, as I grew older I found it's a pity because reading can really provide us a lot of additional information and knowledge.

✓ That was also a pity for me because when I was a kid I didn't read that much, which, as I grew older, I found to be a pity because reading can really provide us with a lot of additional information and knowledge.

The tense should be past ('was') to match 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'found it's a pity' is awkward; 'found to be a pity' is more appropriate. Additionally, 'provide us a lot' should be 'provide us with a lot' to use the correct preposition.

× reading can really provide us a lot of additional information and knowledge.

✓ reading can really provide us with a lot of additional information and knowledge.

The verb 'provide' when used with 'us' requires the preposition 'with' to indicate what is being provided.

× I think it really depends because for some parents they really emphasize the wide rating for their children, so as a result they will encourage their kids to go to library more often, but for others maybe often play with others and go to their relatives.

✓ I think it really depends because some parents really emphasize wide reading for their children, so as a result they will encourage their kids to go to the library more often, but others may often play with friends and go to their relatives.

'The wide rating' is incorrect; it should be 'wide reading'. Also, 'go to library' requires the definite article 'the' as it refers to a specific place. 'Maybe often play with others' is awkward; 'may often play with friends' is clearer and grammatically correct.