Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your sentences more concise and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid minor grammatical errors such as 'I found I'm easier to get focused' – it would be better to say 'I find it easier to focus'.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library during the semester because I find it easier to focus there. Moreover, the library offers many useful resources, such as online systems and extensive collections, which help improve my study efficiency.

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes examples, but there are some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. For instance, 'doing the review for the accountants I have learned' should be 'review the accounting topics I have learned'. Also, use linking words like 'for example' or 'in addition' to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: In the library, I usually study by myself. For example, I complete my daily homework and review the accounting topics I have learned. In addition, I sometimes use the group study room to discuss group projects with my friends.

제안: Your answer is clear and well-structured with reasons supporting your point. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words such as 'because' or 'therefore' to enhance coherence. Also, avoid repeating 'when I was a kid' twice in one answer.

예시: I didn't often go to the library as a child because there were few libraries near my home, making it difficult to visit. Moreover, I spent most of my time playing outdoors, so I read less frequently.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'children's broad rating' and 'they could library less time'. Try to clarify your ideas and use correct expressions. Also, use linking words like 'for instance' and 'however' to improve flow.

예시: I think it depends largely on the parents' attitudes. For instance, some parents emphasise their children's academic development and encourage them to visit the library regularly. However, others may prioritise physical health, so their children spend less time in the library.

× Yes, I often go to the library especially during the semester because I found I'm easier to get focused and my study efficiency is higher in the library and also the library has many studying resources like its website systems and also many collections which is very useful for my study.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library especially during the semester because I find I'm easier to get focused and my study efficiency is higher in the library. Also, the library has many study resources like its website systems and many collections which are very useful for my study.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'found' (past tense) when the present tense 'find' is appropriate to match the ongoing habit. 'Studying resources' should be 'study resources' as 'study' functions as an adjective here. Also, 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with the plural noun 'collections'. Splitting the long sentence improves clarity.

× For example I will finish my daily homework and doing the review for the accountants I have learned.

✓ For example, I will finish my daily homework and do the review for the accounting I have learned.

After 'will', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. 'Doing' should be 'do'. Also, 'accountants' is incorrect; it should be 'accounting' as the subject of study.

× And sometimes I will also use the group study room in the library to talk about the group projects with my friends.

✓ And sometimes I also use the group study room in the library to discuss group projects with my friends.

The phrase 'talk about the group projects' is acceptable but 'discuss group projects' is more formal and appropriate. Also, 'will also use' is better as 'also use' to maintain present tense consistency.

× I didn't often go to the library when I was a kid.

✓ I didn't often go to the library when I was a kid.

This sentence is correct in past tense; no correction needed.

× One important reason is that there were not many libraries nearby my home, so it's a bit far for me to get there.

✓ One important reason is that there were not many libraries near my home, so it was a bit far for me to get there.

The correct preposition is 'near' rather than 'nearby' when used before a noun. Also, 'it's' should be 'it was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× And also when I was a kid I spent most of my time playing outside in nature, so I spent less time reading.

✓ And also, when I was a kid, I spent most of my time playing outside in nature, so I spent less time reading.

The sentence is correct in past tense; adding commas improves readability.

× Well I think it depends largely on their parents attitude.

✓ Well, I think it depends largely on their parents' attitude.

The possessive form 'parents'' requires an apostrophe to indicate possession.

× For example some parents they really emphasize on the children's broad rating so they will encourage them to go to a library.

✓ For example, some parents really emphasize the children's broad reading, so they encourage them to go to a library.

The pronoun 'they' after 'some parents' is redundant and should be removed. 'Emphasize on' is incorrect; 'emphasize' does not require 'on'. 'Broad rating' is likely a typo for 'broad reading'.

× But others maybe they prefer to have a good like physical health so they could library less time.

✓ But others may prefer to have good physical health, so they spend less time in the library.

'Maybe' should be 'may' for modal verb usage. 'Like' is unnecessary and incorrect here. 'Could library less time' is ungrammatical; it should be 'spend less time in the library'.