Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が少し冗長で、文法的な誤りもあります。より自然で効果的な答えにするために、文を簡潔にし、重複を避け、文法を正しく使うことが重要です。例えば、"I used to go to the library when I was a kid because I enjoyed reading many books. They motivated me to study more."のようにすると良いでしょう。

예시: I used to go to the library when I was a child because I enjoyed reading many books. They motivated me to study harder.

제안: 答えが長すぎて、文のつながりが不自然です。より効果的に伝えるために、文を分けて、接続詞を使いながら簡潔に述べることが大切です。例えば、"I usually relax in the library by lying on the sofa. I read as many books as I can and stay until it closes."のようにすると良いでしょう。

예시: I usually relax in the library by lying on the sofa. I read as many books as I can and stay until it closes.

제안: 文が途中で終わっており、意味が伝わりにくいです。文法的にも不自然な部分があるため、答えを完結にし、理由や感情を明確に述べることが必要です。例えば、"Yes, I used to go to the library as a kid. I loved reading many books and relaxing on the sofa there."のようにすると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I used to go to the library as a kid. I loved reading many books and relaxing on the sofa there.

제안: 内容が少し曖昧で、表現も不自然です。より具体的に理由を述べ、文法的に正しい表現を使うことが大切です。例えば、"I think many Chinese kids go to the library because cities are crowded, and the library is a quiet place to relax."のようにすると良いでしょう。

예시: I think many Chinese kids go to the library because cities are crowded, and the library is a quiet place to relax.

× I used to go to the library when I was a kid because I enjoyed reading a book, reading many books and.

✓ I used to go to the library when I was a kid because I enjoyed reading books.

The phrase 'reading a book, reading many books and' is incomplete and redundant. Simplifying to 'reading books' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also, 'used to' correctly indicates past habitual action.

× Because books gave gave me a sense of motivation to study more.

✓ Because books gave me a sense of motivation to study more.

The word 'gave' is repeated twice, which is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× I always chill out in the library and lay down on the sofa and read many books as much as I can and stay until the library closed.

✓ I always chill out in the library, lie down on the sofa, read as many books as I can, and stay until the library closes.

The verb 'lay' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'lie' for reclining. Also, 'stay until the library closed' should be 'stays until the library closes' or 'stay until the library closes' to match present tense. The sentence is about usual actions, so present tense is appropriate.

× I used to go to library when I was a kid and in the library I loved.

✓ I used to go to the library when I was a kid, and in the library I loved reading.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly; adding 'reading' completes the thought.

× I loved reading, reading as many books I as I can, and I loved to lie down on the sofa and relax because.

✓ I loved reading, reading as many books as I could, and I loved to lie down on the sofa and relax.

The phrase 'reading as many books I as I can' is incorrect; it should be 'reading as many books as I could' to match past tense. The sentence ends abruptly with 'because' which should be removed or completed.

× I think so because in China, you know, there's so many population, barely condensed society.

✓ I think so because in China, you know, there's such a large population and a densely populated society.

The phrase 'there's so many population' is incorrect because 'population' is uncountable and singular. It should be 'there's such a large population'. Also, 'barely condensed society' is incorrect; 'densely populated society' is the correct expression.