Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Try to avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, say "No, I usually prefer reading books at home because it's more comfortable. However, when I was a teenager, I enjoyed going to the library because of its quiet atmosphere."

예시: No, I usually prefer reading books at home because it's more comfortable. However, when I was a teenager, I enjoyed going to the library because of its quiet atmosphere.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Use a clear topic sentence and link your ideas logically. For example, say "I usually read my favorite books in the library because it helps me relax and the peaceful environment is very calming."

예시: I usually read my favorite books in the library because it helps me relax and the peaceful environment is very calming.

제안: Your answer is quite good but can be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding filler words like "umm." Also, be more specific and concise. For example, say "I didn't go to the library often as a child because I preferred playing outdoors with my friends. However, sometimes I visited the library with my parents to borrow storybooks."

예시: I didn't go to the library often as a child because I preferred playing outdoors with my friends. However, sometimes I visited the library with my parents to borrow storybooks.

제안: Your answer is relevant and clear but can be improved by using correct phrases and linking words. For example, say "I think Chinese kids often go to the library because the education system in China strongly emphasizes studying and self-learning. For instance, many schools encourage students to visit libraries regularly to access books and other learning materials."

예시: I think Chinese kids often go to the library because the education system in China strongly emphasizes studying and self-learning. For instance, many schools encourage students to visit libraries regularly to access books and other learning materials.

× Actually no, this is I'm I just prefer to reading book at home.

✓ Actually no, I just prefer reading books at home.

The original sentence contains incorrect conjunction and unnecessary words ('this is I'm'). Also, 'to reading' is incorrect; it should be 'reading' without 'to'. The corrected sentence removes these errors for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Actually no, this is I'm I just prefer to reading book at home.

✓ Actually no, I just prefer reading books at home.

After the verb 'prefer', the gerund form 'reading' should be used without 'to'. Also, 'book' should be plural 'books' to indicate general preference.

× But as remember as a teenager I would like to reading book library because of atmosphere.

✓ But as I remember, as a teenager I liked reading books in the library because of the atmosphere.

The sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms. 'Would like to reading' is incorrect; it should be 'liked reading'. Also, 'book' should be plural 'books', and 'library' needs the preposition 'in the'. 'As remember' should be 'as I remember'.

× But as remember as a teenager I would like to reading book library because of atmosphere.

✓ But as I remember, as a teenager I liked reading books in the library because of the atmosphere.

The verb 'like' in past tense is 'liked', and it should be followed by the gerund 'reading'. Also, 'reading book' should be 'reading books'.

× But as remember as a teenager I would like to reading book library because of atmosphere.

✓ But as I remember, as a teenager I liked reading books in the library because of the atmosphere.

The phrase 'reading book library' is missing the preposition 'in the' before 'library'. Also, 'atmosphere' needs the definite article 'the'.

× I usually are reading my favorite books because when I decided to go library I just wanted to be more relaxed and because library makes me sense of peaceful.

✓ I usually read my favorite books because when I decide to go to the library, I just want to be more relaxed, and the library gives me a sense of peace.

'I usually are reading' is incorrect; it should be 'I usually read' (simple present). 'Decided' should be 'decide' to match the habitual action. 'Go library' needs the preposition 'to the library'. 'Library makes me sense of peaceful' is incorrect; it should be 'the library gives me a sense of peace'.

× I usually are reading my favorite books because when I decided to go library I just wanted to be more relaxed and because library makes me sense of peaceful.

✓ I usually read my favorite books because when I decide to go to the library, I just want to be more relaxed, and the library gives me a sense of peace.

The phrase 'go library' is missing the preposition 'to'. Also, 'makes me sense of peaceful' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'gives me a sense of peace'.

× As I remember, I didn't go to the library very often when I was a kid because I was a playful child.

✓ As I remember, I didn't go to the library very often when I was a kid because I was a playful child.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× As, umm, other children, I prefer spending time outdoors, playing with my friends and harvest.

✓ Like other children, I preferred spending time outdoors, playing with my friends and harvesting.

'As other children' should be 'Like other children' to express similarity. 'Prefer' should be in past tense 'preferred' to match the past context. 'Harvest' should be 'harvesting' to match the gerund form after 'playing'.

× As, umm, other children, I prefer spending time outdoors, playing with my friends and harvest.

✓ Like other children, I preferred spending time outdoors, playing with my friends and harvesting.

After 'playing with my friends and', the verb should be in gerund form 'harvesting' to maintain parallel structure.

× Sometimes I would visit the library with my parents to borrow storybooks.

✓ Sometimes I would visit the library with my parents to borrow storybooks.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× I think Chinese kids often go to the library because the education system in China places a strong emphasize on studying and self learning.

✓ I think Chinese kids often go to the library because the education system in China places a strong emphasis on studying and self-learning.

The noun 'emphasize' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'emphasis'. Also, 'self learning' should be hyphenated as 'self-learning'.

× For example, many schools encourage students to visit libraries regularly to access books and other learning materials.

✓ For example, many schools encourage students to visit libraries regularly to access books and other learning materials.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.