Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu tự nhiên hơn. Hãy chia câu thành các câu ngắn gọn, sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để nối ý và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn thích thư viện.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books about science and social topics. Moreover, the library is comfortable and surrounded by greenery, which makes it a quiet place to do homework and read.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết và nói lắp. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm trong thư viện.

예시: Usually, I read science comics and cartoons like Doraemon in the library. Besides that, I also do my homework there because it is a quiet environment.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, tránh lỗi sai về thì và số nhiều. Hãy trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để mô tả trải nghiệm của bạn khi còn nhỏ.

예시: Yes, I went to the library when I was a kid because I wanted to explore books on different topics like cartoons and nature. The library was always quiet and comfortable.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh nói lắp. Bạn nên giải thích rõ hơn về thói quen đọc sách của trẻ em Trung Quốc với các ví dụ cụ thể.

예시: I think Chinese kids often go to the library because they want to read books about science and cartoons. They also use the library to learn about social issues and everyday life.

× I often do go to the library because I really like many book about the science, the social or other topic beside the library have comfortable and green aspects and uh, I think that it is very quiet to do homework and read book.

✓ I often go to the library because I really like many books about science, social studies, or other topics. Besides, the library has comfortable and green areas, and I think it is very quiet to do homework and read books.

The word 'book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to multiple items. 'Topic' should be plural 'topics' to match 'many'. 'Beside' should be 'Besides' as a transition word. 'Library have' is incorrect; it should be 'library has' to agree with singular subject. 'Green aspects' is better expressed as 'green areas'. 'Read book' should be 'read books' to indicate plural.

× I often do go to the library because I really like many book about the science, the social or other topic beside the library have comfortable and green aspects and uh, I think that it is very quiet to do homework and read book.

✓ I often go to the library because I really like many books about science, social studies, or other topics. Besides, the library has comfortable and green areas, and I think it is very quiet to do homework and read books.

The preposition 'about' is correct, but 'beside' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'Besides' to introduce an additional point. Also, 'to do homework and read book' is better expressed without prepositions here.

× I often, uh, read comic book about the science and the cartoon, uh, such as Doraemon or content.

✓ I often read comic books about science and cartoons, such as Doraemon or Conan.

'Comic book' should be plural 'comic books' because it refers to multiple items. 'The science' and 'the cartoon' are incorrect; 'science' and 'cartoons' should be used without 'the' and in plural form. 'Content' seems to be a mishearing or typo; 'Conan' is a common cartoon name that fits the context.

× Beside I also, uh, do homework to uh needs, uh, have some mission for like, uh, session.

✓ Besides, I also do homework when I need to complete some assignments for sessions.

'Beside' should be 'Besides' as a transition word. 'Do homework to needs' is incorrect; it should be 'do homework when I need to'. 'Have some mission for like session' is unclear; 'complete some assignments for sessions' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I uh, girls, I went to the library when I were a kid because I want to explore the notice about many books in a different topic in a cartoon, natural or other topic.

✓ I went to the library when I was a kid because I wanted to explore information about many books on different topics like cartoons, nature, or other subjects.

'I were' should be 'I was' for first person singular past tense. 'I want' should be 'I wanted' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Notice about many books' is incorrect; 'information about many books' is better. 'In a different topic in a cartoon, natural or other topic' is awkward; 'on different topics like cartoons, nature, or other subjects' is clearer.

× I uh, girls, I went to the library when I were a kid because I want to explore the notice about many books in a different topic in a cartoon, natural or other topic.

✓ I went to the library when I was a kid because I wanted to explore information about many books on different topics like cartoons, nature, or other subjects.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used; 'on' is the correct preposition for topics. Also, 'a different topic in a cartoon' is unclear; 'different topics like cartoons' is better.

× Beside, the library is also quiet and comfortable.

✓ Besides, the library is also quiet and comfortable.

'Beside' should be 'Besides' as a transition word. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× I think that the Chinese kids often do go to the library because they want to, uh, read some books about the science.

✓ I think that Chinese kids often go to the library because they want to read some books about science.

'The Chinese kids' can be simplified to 'Chinese kids' for general statements. 'The science' should be 'science' without 'the'.

× The cartoon, uh, beside are also, uh, have noticed and, uh, know about the information in uh, social and their life.

✓ Cartoons also help them notice and learn about information in social studies and their lives.

'The cartoon, beside are also, have noticed' is incorrect and unclear. 'Beside' should be 'Besides' or omitted. 'Have noticed and know about the information in social and their life' is awkward; 'help them notice and learn about information in social studies and their lives' is clearer and grammatically correct.