Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeated phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I don't often go to the library, but when I need to study, I prefer it because the quiet environment helps me focus. Moreover, seeing others study motivates me to work harder.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific examples of activities you do in the library.

예시: In the library, I usually study or complete homework and research papers. Additionally, I enjoy browsing books because the peaceful atmosphere encourages me to read more.

제안: Reduce hesitation and grammatical errors. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons using linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: Yes, I visited the library as a child with my dad, who loved reading. He encouraged me because he believed that reading improves vocabulary and expands knowledge.

제안: Avoid uncertainty and filler words. Answer directly and provide specific reasons with linking words. Make sure your sentences are complete and clear.

예시: I am not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library, but I believe all children should visit libraries because they help expand knowledge and skills in a peaceful environment.

× Honestly speaking, I don't often go to library at all, but sometimes when I do want to study something, I would prefer going to a library environment because it provides, uh, it, it's a place where a lot of people study and do their work, which would encourage the people like us to study in such environment and it would definitely motivate others to study as well and.

✓ Honestly speaking, I don't often go to the library at all, but sometimes when I do want to study something, I would prefer going to a library environment because it provides, uh, it, it's a place where a lot of people study and do their work, which would encourage people like us to study in such an environment and it would definitely motivate others to study as well.

The noun 'library' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'the people like us' should be 'people like us' without 'the' because it refers to people in general, not a specific group. Additionally, 'such environment' needs the article 'an' because 'environment' is singular and countable. Using correct articles improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Mostly I would be studying or doing some kind of works in the library, like maybe work, doing at homework or maybe working on a research papers.

✓ Mostly I would be studying or doing some kind of work in the library, like maybe doing homework or maybe working on research papers.

The word 'works' is incorrect here because 'work' in this context is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, 'doing at homework' is incorrect; it should be 'doing homework' without 'at'. 'Research papers' is plural and correct, so 'a research papers' is wrong; it should be 'research papers' without 'a'. Correcting these ensures proper noun usage and article application.

× So those are the things that make, uh, may keeps me occupied, uh, in the library.

✓ So those are the things that may keep me occupied in the library.

The modal verb 'may' should be followed by the base form of the verb without 's'. 'Keeps' is incorrect after 'may'; it should be 'keep'. Also, 'make' is correct here as it refers to 'things' plural. Removing unnecessary fillers improves sentence clarity.

× But I would also love to walk around the library and look around those books, which also a library is a very peaceful environment and would motivate us to like read.

✓ But I would also love to walk around the library and look at the books, as the library is a very peaceful environment and would motivate us to read.

The phrase 'look around those books' is awkward; 'look at the books' is more natural. The clause 'which also a library is a very peaceful environment' is ungrammatical; it should be restructured to 'as the library is a very peaceful environment'. Also, 'motivate us to like read' is incorrect; 'to read' suffices. These changes improve sentence coherence and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I did, uh, visit library when I was child with my dad because he's somebody who loved, uh, reading books and he have always encouraged and motivated me to read books because he believes that reading books would bring a lot of, uh, improvement in your vocabulary and also it would expand our knowledge as well.

✓ Yes, I did visit the library when I was a child with my dad because he's somebody who loved reading books and he has always encouraged and motivated me to read books because he believes that reading books would bring a lot of improvement in your vocabulary and also it would expand our knowledge as well.

'Visit library' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place. 'When I was child' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'child'. 'He have' is incorrect; it should be 'he has' for third person singular present perfect. These corrections ensure proper article use and subject-verb agreement.

× he have always encouraged and motivated me to read books because he believes that reading books would bring a lot of, uh, improvement in your vocabulary and also it would expand our knowledge as well.

✓ he has always encouraged and motivated me to read books because he believes that reading books would bring a lot of improvement in your vocabulary and also it would expand our knowledge as well.

The subject 'he' requires the verb 'has' in present perfect tense, not 'have'. Correct subject-verb agreement is essential for grammatical accuracy.

× Well, I'm not sure about those, uh, Chinese kids specifically going to the library or not, but I would definitely say that all the kids should visit the library because it's an environment where it would help to expand your knowledge and also your other capabilities.

✓ Well, I'm not sure about those Chinese kids specifically going to the library or not, but I would definitely say that all kids should visit the library because it's an environment that helps to expand your knowledge and also your other capabilities.

'All the kids' can be simplified to 'all kids' when speaking generally. 'It would help' is better as 'it helps' to express a general truth. Also, 'where it would help to expand' is better as 'that helps to expand' for clarity. These changes improve naturalness and grammatical correctness.