Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons with linking words such as 'because' or 'since'.

예시: I don't go to the library very often nowadays because the internet provides easy access to information. However, when I was a student, I used to visit the library every day since there were no online resources available.

제안: Avoid repeating words like 'usually' and complete your sentences clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details about your activities in the library.

예시: In the library, I usually take notes from important passages and sometimes take photos of relevant magazine articles. This helps me gather information for my assignments efficiently.

제안: Complete your sentences fully and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details about your experience in the library as a child.

예시: Yes, when I was a kid, I used to go to the library almost every day. I would spend half the day there reading books and taking notes for my schoolwork.

제안: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific examples of what Chinese kids do in the library.

예시: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library where they sit comfortably and focus on their school projects. They enjoy reading different stories and sometimes take notes for their assignments.

× then was not Internet possibilities.

✓ there were no Internet possibilities.

The sentence lacks the correct use of 'there be' structure. 'Then was not Internet possibilities' is incorrect because 'there' is missing and 'possibilities' is plural, so the verb should be 'were'. The correct form is 'there were no Internet possibilities.' This structure is used to indicate the existence or presence of something.

× And we, uh, children had to go there to read, to write down all the passages, uh, essential passages.

✓ And we, uh, children had to go there to read, to write down all the essential passages.

The phrase 'all the passages, uh, essential passages' is redundant and awkward. The adjective 'essential' should directly modify 'passages' without repetition. Also, 'passages' is plural and correctly used here. The correction improves clarity and conciseness.

× I usually take photos of important magazines and the queries I need to use them in my, in my notes in my.

✓ I usually take photos of important magazines and the queries I need to use in my notes.

The phrase 'use them in my, in my notes in my' is repetitive and incorrect. The preposition 'in' is correctly used before 'my notes', but the repetition and extra 'in my' at the end are unnecessary. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and clarifies the meaning.

× mostly stay there half of the day and read the books there.

✓ mostly stayed there half of the day and read books there.

The verb tense should be past ('stayed') to match 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'books' is plural and correctly used, but 'the books' implies specific books which may not be intended. Removing 'the' makes it more general. This correction aligns verb tense and article usage.

× Sit there for all the time and write down the.

✓ I sat there all the time and wrote notes.

The original sentence lacks a subject and is incomplete ('write down the' what?). Adding the subject 'I' and completing the sentence with 'wrote notes' corrects the sentence structure and makes it meaningful.

× Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library, sit there comfortably, focus on their school projects and learn a lot to enjoying their different stories.

✓ Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library, sit there comfortably, focus on their school projects, and enjoy different stories.

The phrase 'learn a lot to enjoying' is incorrect. The correct form is 'and enjoy' to maintain parallel structure with previous verbs. Also, 'their different stories' is better as 'different stories' for clarity. The correction fixes conjunction use and verb form.