Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms, articles, and pluralization (e.g., "books" not "book"). Avoid contradictory words like "sometimes" and "most of the time" together. Use linking words such as "because" or "and" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading motivational and educational books. For example, I usually borrow a self-help book and a short story collection each time, which helps me relax and learn new ideas.

제안: Give a clear main sentence about your usual activities, then add specific details and use linking words. Fix grammar ("I read" not "I do the read"), use plural nouns, and avoid repetition. Mention concrete actions (reading, studying, borrowing) and why you do them.

예시: I usually read new books and take notes while I am in the library because it helps me remember ideas. For instance, I often read short stories or articles and write down interesting points in my notebook.

제안: Answer directly with a simple past statement and one or two supporting specific details. Correct tense and word choice ("When I was in grade 6, I first went to the library"). Remove fillers like "you know" and unclear words like "cagey." Describe one clear memory to make the answer vivid.

예시: Yes. When I was in grade 6 I first went to the school library, and I remember being very excited because I had never seen so many books. I especially liked a colourful book stall near the entrance that caught my eye.

제안: Be careful making broad generalizations. Start with a clear opinion phrase ("I'm not sure, but...") then give a reason or an example. Use correct grammar and avoid awkward phrases. If unsure, say you don't know and offer a reasonable guess with evidence or comparisons.

예시: I'm not sure about all Chinese children, but I think many do use libraries because education is highly valued in China. For example, schools often encourage students to visit libraries for study and homework, so library use is likely common.

× Yeah, basically I some of the time I go to the library to read more moral educational book and motivational book.

✓ Yeah, basically sometimes I go to the library to read more moral and educational books and motivational books.

Incorrect or missing quantifiers and plural forms: 'some of the time' is awkward here; use 'sometimes'. 'Book' should be plural when referring to types or multiple items: 'books'. Also adjectives need correct order and conjunction: 'moral and educational books' or 'moral, educational, and motivational books'. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' for frequency and pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally about categories of books.

× And I love to read the gossip book and the story book is my favorite.

✓ I also love to read gossip books, and story books are my favorite.

Adjective-noun agreement and article use: 'gossip book' and 'story book' should be plural when referring generally. The original sentence also mixes structures ('I love to read... and ... is my favorite'); separate clauses clearly. Suggestion: pluralize general categories and keep parallel structure: 'I love to read gossip books, and story books are my favorite.'

× That's why most of the time I go to the library.

✓ That's why most of the time I go to the library.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. It correctly matches subject and verb. Note: kept for completeness; no correction required.

× Basically in the library I always prefer to do the read, read the new type of book and a book are always refresh our mind and I always love to read book.

✓ Basically, in the library I always prefer to read new kinds of books; books always refresh our minds and I always love to read.

Preposition and article misuse and pluralization: remove 'to do the read' (incorrect expression) and use 'prefer to read'. 'New type of book' should be 'new kinds of books' or 'new types of books'. 'A book are' is wrong: plural 'books always refresh our minds'. Also 'read book' should be 'read' or 'read books'. Suggestion: use 'prefer to read' + plural for general statements and correct subject-verb agreement.

× That's why when I usually go to the library and I always reading some of the new experience.

✓ That's why when I go to the library I usually read and always seek new experiences.

Adverb placement and verb form: 'when I usually go' is awkward; place 'usually' after subject or before main verb: 'I usually go' or 'when I go'. 'I always reading' is incorrect — use 'I always read' or 'I am always reading' depending on aspect. 'Some of the new experience' is ungrammatical; use 'new experiences'. Suggestion: place adverbs near verbs and use correct verb forms and pluralize countable nouns.

× When I was reading class 6, first time I go to the library and this time this, this experience is super cagey because you know, this time I was a kid and and the new experience you the the new bookshop book stall in front of my eye.

✓ When I was in sixth grade, I went to the library for the first time and that experience was very exciting because I was a kid and I saw a new bookshop and book stall in front of my eyes.

Tense and word choice errors: 'was reading class 6' should be 'was in sixth grade'. First-time events require past simple: 'I went'. 'This experience is super cagey' is incorrect vocabulary and tense; use 'that experience was very exciting'. Repetition and word order corrected: 'I saw a new bookshop and book stall in front of my eyes.' Suggestion: use past simple for completed past events and choose appropriate adjectives ('exciting' not 'cagey').

× That's why I'm super excited.

✓ That's why I was so excited.

Tense consistency: original is in past narrative, so use past tense 'was' rather than present 'am'. 'So excited' is more natural in narration. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense when describing past events.

× Clearly, I don't know the Chinese kids are often go to the library, but in the in our in the in his country's perspective, like Chinese are the most educated countries ever in the Asia.

✓ Clearly, I don't know whether Chinese kids often go to the library, but from my country's perspective, China is one of the most educated countries in Asia.

Sentence structure and phrasing errors: 'I don't know the Chinese kids are often go' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't know whether Chinese kids often go'. Remove repetitive prepositions 'in the in our in the in his country's perspective' and replace with 'from my country's perspective'. 'Chinese are the most educated countries' is incorrect: 'China is one of the most educated countries in Asia' is grammatically correct and clear. Suggestion: use 'whether' for uncertainty and correct noun-verb agreement for countries.

× That's why I think people go to the library and read most motivational.

✓ That's why I think people go to the library and read mostly motivational books.

Adverb/adjective and noun form: 'read most motivational' is incomplete; 'mostly motivational books' or 'read mostly motivational books' is correct. Also keep present simple for general statements: 'I think people go... and read...'. Suggestion: use adverb 'mostly' and include the noun 'books' when referring to reading.