Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and natural: remove fillers (uh, umm), use correct tense and clearer frequency expression, and keep it concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I go to the library regularly.”), give a specific frequency, and briefly explain why using one supporting detail connected with a linking word.

예시: Yes, I go to the library every week because I enjoy reading and checking out new books. For example, I usually borrow the latest novels or non-fiction titles to read at home.

제안: Improve accuracy and coherence: correct mistakes (book not box; I read / I usually read), use linking words to structure the answer (for example, or if not), and avoid repetition. Give one clear topic sentence then a concise supporting detail with a specific example of book types and a linking phrase about borrowing.

예시: I usually read books in the library, especially story books and history books because I want to learn more. If I’m short on time, I borrow books to take home and continue reading there.

제안: Use past simple correctly and reduce fillers: say ‘Yes, I went to the library as a child.’ Provide a concise reason and one specific detail (a favourite type of book) to support your statement. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘when’ for clarity.

예시: Yes, I went to the library often when I was a child because I loved storybooks and picture books. For example, I remember borrowing fairy tales almost every week.

제안: Avoid vague language and unclear opinions: start with a direct, honest response (e.g. “I’m not sure, but from my experience…”), then give a balanced, specific reason. Avoid awkward or potentially offensive phrases (e.g. “they are very intelligent” as a generalization). Use linking words to present your view politely, and give an example or source of your impression.

예시: I’m not sure about all Chinese children, but from my experience many do visit libraries because schools encourage reading. For example, classmates of mine often borrowed books for school projects and extra reading.

× Yes, I'm going uh, uh, in the library, umm, after a week because I like to read books, so I find the new books at the library.

✓ Yes, I go to the library about once a week because I like to read books, and I often find new books there.

Original used incorrect preposition 'in the library' with present habitual time and awkward tense 'I'm going... after a week.' Replace with simple present 'I go' for habitual action and use 'to the library' for direction. Also use 'there' to avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I usually read the box, uh, like the story books or the history books to gain more knowledge.

✓ I usually read books, such as story books or history books, to gain more knowledge.

The word 'box' is incorrect; use 'books'. Also 'story books' and 'history books' are fine but should be introduced with 'such as' or 'like'. Keep simple present 'read' for habitual action. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Uh, so usually I just reading the books or otherwise if I don't have time, so I just borrow books from the library and come back at home and read them at home.

✓ So usually I just read the books, or if I don't have time I borrow them from the library and read them at home.

Incorrect continuous form 'I just reading' should be simple present 'I just read' for habitual actions. 'Come back at home' is incorrect preposition; use 'read them at home'. Remove redundant 'so' and streamline sentence. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Yeah, I was uh, going uh, to library, uh, in my childhood, uh, because that time I like the story books and some kids books.

✓ Yeah, I used to go to the library in my childhood because at that time I liked story books and children's books.

For past habitual actions use 'used to go' or simple past 'went'. 'To library' needs the article 'the'. 'In my childhood' is acceptable but 'when I was a child' is more natural; keep 'in my childhood' here. Verb 'like' should be past 'liked'. Use 'children's books' instead of 'kids books'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× So umm yeah, uh, like from my childhood, I love to read the books.

✓ So, since my childhood, I have loved reading books.

Expressing an action that started in the past and continues to present requires present perfect 'have loved'. Use 'reading' (verb+ -ing) to show habit. Drop definite article 'the' before 'books' when speaking generally. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I don't know about that but definitely what I hate and read and uh listen from other people.

✓ I don't know about that for sure, but this is what I have heard from other people.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'What I hate and read' is incorrect; likely intended 'what I heard and read' or 'what I have heard from other people'. Use present perfect 'have heard' to report information from others. Avoid 'definitely' + contradictory phrasing; use 'for sure' or 'as far as I know'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Like Chinese kids are also like to go to library because they are very intelligent and they are interested to get the knowledge.

✓ Chinese kids also like to go to the library because they are very studious and interested in gaining knowledge.

Use 'like to' as 'like to go' or 'also like going'; original 'are also like to go' is ungrammatical. Include the article 'the library'. 'Intelligent' is acceptable but 'studious' fits better in this context; use preposition 'interested in' not 'interested to'. Use 'gaining knowledge' rather than 'get the knowledge'. Grammar problem type ID:11