Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите более прямо и грамматически правильно; избегайте заполнителей (umm) и ошибок согласования. Начните с чётного топик‑предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретные причины, используя связки (because, so, therefore). Уменьшите повторения и не превышайте 3–4 предложений.

예시: I don't often go to the library because I prefer buying new books. For me, new books feel fresher and I enjoy the smell and feel of them, so I usually shop for books online or at local bookstores.

제안: Исправьте непонятные выражения и используйте более точную лексику; начните с прямого ответа и затем перечислите конкретные виды деятельности с логичными связками. Избегайте фраз типа "and such things" — заменяйте конкретными действиями.

예시: When I use the library, I usually do my homework and study quietly. I also use the computers there to browse the internet for research and print documents.

제안: Сформулируйте предложения яснее и грамматически правильно; используйте прошедшее время последовательно и добавьте одну конкретную деталь (например, как часто или почему не ходили). Сведите ответ к 2–3 предложениям.

예시: I visited the library a couple of times when I was a child, usually on school trips. Because these visits were rare, I don't have much experience of going there regularly.

제안: Избегайте стереотипов и неопределённых утверждений; дайте осторожный, обоснованный ответ и приведите причину или пример. Используйте связки (however, because, for example) и точную лексику.

예시: I'm not completely sure, but I think many Chinese children do visit libraries, especially for school assignments and extra study. For example, schools often organize library visits and parents encourage reading at home.

× I prefer buying new books because I don't like books that, umm, has that are ancient and been used many times.

✓ I prefer buying new books because I don't like books that are ancient and have been used many times.

The original sentence has subject-verb agreement and verb form errors. 'books that has' is incorrect because 'books' is plural and requires 'have' (Grammar problem type 27: Subject-verb agreement and type 9: past participle). Also 'been used' needs the auxiliary 'have' to form the present perfect passive 'have been used'. Suggestion: Use 'that are ancient and have been used many times' to match plural subject and correct tense and voice.

× And I prefer to experience a new book, to smell it, to feel it.

✓ I prefer to experience a new book: to smell it and to feel it.

This sentence is generally understandable but the list of infinitives lacks parallel punctuation and conjunction. Use 'and' before the final item and a colon or comma to introduce the list for clarity. Ensure parallel structure by keeping 'to' before each verb or only before the first verb consistently.

× Well, the last time I was elaborate was in university.

✓ Well, the last time I was there was when I was at university.

The phrase 'was elaborate' is incorrect in this context. Likely the student intended to indicate 'the last time I was there'. Use 'there' to refer to the library and 'when I was at university' to give time. This corrects sentence structure and word choice.

× I used it to do my homework, to surf net on the computer, to spend the time on study and such things.

✓ I used it to do my homework, to surf the net on the computer, to spend time studying and similar things.

Preposition and noun phrase errors: use 'surf the net' (article 'the'), 'spend time studying' is the correct verb-noun combination instead of 'spend the time on study'. Also 'similar things' is a clearer phrase than 'such things'. Maintain parallel gerund forms for activities.

× Well, I visited the library a couple of times when I was a kid and it was in the group of children when I was at school, so I didn't have such a big experience of visiting library.

✓ Well, I visited the library a couple of times when I was a kid, and it was during a school group visit, so I didn't have much experience of visiting the library.

Use articles: 'the library' required at end. Replace 'in the group of children' with 'during a school group visit' for natural phrasing. Use 'much experience' rather than 'big experience'. Fix sentence flow and articles.

× I'm not really familiar with Chinese kids habits, but I can assume that they visit library often because I think they are smart and the library is a place where children can gain some knowledge.

✓ I'm not really familiar with Chinese kids' habits, but I can assume that they visit the library often because I think they are studious and the library is a place where children can gain knowledge.

Add possessive apostrophe 'kids' to 'kids'' to show possession. Use 'the library' with article. 'Smart' is acceptable but 'studious' fits context better. Omit 'some' before 'knowledge' for natural English. Also place adverb 'often' before or after verb for smoother flow: 'visit the library often'.