Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise; start with a direct topic sentence about frequency, then give a brief reason. Avoid awkward phrasing like "talk to books" which sounds odd. Use a linking phrase to connect reason to frequency.

예시: Yes, I go to the library quite often, usually several times a week, because I enjoy quiet places to read. For example, I prefer libraries when I want to concentrate on novels or study without interruptions.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid repeating the same idea twice; combine into one fluid sentence and add a short supporting detail (when, why, or an example).

예시: I usually read novels in the library, because the quiet environment helps me concentrate. For instance, I often spend an hour reading contemporary fiction at a corner table after dinner.

제안: Begin with a direct yes/no response, then give specific supporting details and a linking word. The answer is personable—improve by replacing informal words like "guy" with "man" or "person" and adding a time phrase or brief example.

예시: Yes, I did. My father loved books too, so he used to take me to the library every week when I was a child, and I remember borrowing picture books and early novels on those visits.

제안: Avoid unclear or grammatically incorrect phrases. Start with a clear direct answer (e.g., "I'm not sure"), then give a reasonable opinion with a clear reason and an example. Use linking words like "however" or "but" to connect ideas.

예시: I'm not entirely sure, but I think many Chinese children do visit libraries, especially in cities, because schools often organize library visits and parents encourage reading. For example, I know several classmates who went to the public library after school to borrow books.

× I am an introvert guy.

✓ I am an introverted guy.

The adjective form 'introvert' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'introverted'. Use 'introverted' to describe a person. Suggestion: use adjective forms when describing nouns (introverted, talkative).

× I don't talk to people, so I talk to books and novels.

✓ I don't talk to people, so I read books and novels instead.

The original sentence uses 'talk to' twice; talking to books is odd and likely unintended. Changing to 'read' matches the meaning and corrects verb usage. Suggestion: choose verbs that match the intended action (read instead of talk).

× Usually I prefer to read novels, sit quietly and read my novel.

✓ Usually I prefer to read novels, sit quietly, and read my novel.

The list of activities should be parallel; adding a comma before 'and' improves clarity and maintains parallel structure. Also 'read novels' and 'read my novel' are repetitive; consider 'read novels and sit quietly.' Suggestion: keep parallel structure and avoid repetition.

× Yeah, my dad was also an introvert guy and a bookish person, so he used to take me along with him every week.

✓ Yeah, my dad was also an introverted, bookish person, so he used to take me with him every week.

Use adjective 'introverted' instead of noun 'introvert' to describe the father. 'Take me along with him' is wordy; 'take me with him' is more natural. 'Used to' correctly indicates habitual past. Suggestion: use concise, natural phrasing and correct adjective forms.

× To be honest, I don't know about that, but I think so there used to work.

✓ To be honest, I don't know about that, but I think many do.

The original sentence 'I think so there used to work' is ungrammatical and unclear. It appears to attempt to say that many Chinese kids go to the library. 'I think many do' is a concise, grammatical way to express this. Suggestion: keep sentences clear and match subject and verb; avoid literal translations that break English word order.