Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense consistency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence addressing the present frequency, then give a brief past contrast with correct tenses and concise linking words. Avoid redundancy and awkward phrasing (e.g. “shared for information online”).

예시: I don't go to the library very often now. I used it regularly when I was writing my college thesis because I needed quiet and access to reference books, but these days I usually find information online because of my busy schedule.

제안: Provide one clear, coherent answer. Correct word choice (e.g. “provide environment” → “a quiet environment”; “brewery” is incorrect) and avoid hesitation. Use linking words to contrast past and present. Keep within 3–4 sentences and give specific examples of what you do there.

예시: When I was at university I mainly used the library to work on my thesis and consult academic books by authors like Julia Davis. Now I mostly visit the library to borrow contemporary fiction novels, which I enjoy reading at home.

제안: Good content and clear past tense. Improve sentence fluency and correct small errors (e.g. “spend hour” → “spend hours”, “the morning until the evening” → “from morning until evening”). Combine short fragments into complete sentences and add a brief supporting detail.

예시: Yes, I often went to the city library when I was at school because my school didn't have one. I used to spend hours there, reading from morning until evening, especially storybooks and adventure novels.

제안: Avoid unclear or incorrect vocabulary and make cautious generalizations. Begin by acknowledging limited personal experience, then give a clear, supported opinion. Correct word choices (e.g. “buffet” and “violent” are wrong) and explain reasons briefly with linking words.

예시: I can't speak for everyone, but in my experience many Chinese children do visit libraries because schools and parents encourage reading and exam preparation. As a result, they often use libraries to borrow books and to study after school.

× I sometimes use the library when I was working on my college thesis because I needed quiet space and reference books.

✓ I sometimes used the library when I was working on my college thesis because I needed a quiet space and reference books.

The sentence mixes present simple 'use' with past context 'when I was working'. Use past tense 'used' for consistency. Also add the article 'a' before 'quiet space'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for events in the past and include necessary articles.

× Nowadays I really go to the library due to my busy schedule and I usually shared for information online instead.

✓ Nowadays I rarely go to the library due to my busy schedule and I usually search for information online instead.

The original uses 'really' incorrectly and 'shared' is past tense; context requires adverb 'rarely' and present tense verb 'search'. 'Shared' should be 'search' meaning look for information. Also 'for information' follows 'search' directly. Suggestion: use appropriate adverb ('rarely') and correct present tense verb 'search'.

× Uh, during my college year, I usually go to library to work on my college thesis because I need to provide environment and I often consult academic books and Julia Dale.

✓ Uh, during my college years, I usually went to the library to work on my college thesis because I needed a quiet environment and I often consulted academic books and materials by Julia Dale.

Mixes present tense 'go'/'need'/'consult' with past time frame 'during my college years'. Change to past tense verbs 'went', 'needed', 'consulted'. Also 'library' needs article 'the'; pluralize 'year' to 'years' for typical phrasing; 'provide environment' is incorrect — use 'quiet environment'. Clarify 'Julia Dale' as 'materials by Julia Dale' unless a book title is specified.

× But uh, right now, uh, I usually go to the brewery to borrow fiction book regularly, mostly contemporary novel, uh, which I enjoy reading at home.

✓ But right now, I usually go to the library to borrow fiction books regularly, mostly contemporary novels, which I enjoy reading at home.

'Brewery' is incorrect meaning; should be 'library'. 'Fiction book' needs plural 'fiction books' because 'regularly' implies repeated action; 'contemporary novel' should be plural 'contemporary novels'. Also removed filler words for clarity. Suggestion: use correct nouns and match singular/plural with context.

× Yes, I often went to the city library when I was at school because we didn't have a library at my school.

✓ Yes, I often went to the city library when I was at school because we didn't have a library at my school.

This sentence is already correct in tense and structure. No change needed. Explanation: Past narrative uses past tense 'went' and 'didn't have' appropriately.

× I used to spend hour there reading the morning until the evening.

✓ I used to spend hours there reading from morning until evening.

Missing plural 'hours' and incorrect prepositional phrases. Use 'from morning until evening' to indicate time span. Suggestion: pluralize 'hour' to 'hours' and use 'from...until' structure.

× Especially storybook and adventure novel.

✓ I especially enjoyed storybooks and adventure novels.

Fragment missing subject and verb. Convert to a full sentence with subject 'I' and verb 'enjoyed', and pluralize 'storybook' and 'adventure novel' to match general preference. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by including subject and verb.

× I don't really know many Chinese children personally so I can only speak genuinely.

✓ I don't really know many Chinese children personally, so I can only speak generally.

'Speak genuinely' is incorrect collocation; 'speak generally' fits the meaning. Also add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: choose the correct adverb to convey intended meaning.

× Many Chinese kids do visit library and buffet because violent school encourage reading and studying for exam, so they often use library to borrow books and do homework.

✓ Many Chinese kids do visit libraries and public reading rooms because schools encourage reading and studying for exams, so they often use libraries to borrow books and do homework.

Multiple errors: 'visit library and buffet' is incorrect — likely 'libraries and public reading rooms' or just 'libraries'. 'Violent school' is wrong word; should be 'schools'. Add plural 'libraries' and 'exams'. Also correct subject-verb agreement 'schools encourage'. Add articles where needed. Suggestion: use correct nouns, plural forms, and appropriate vocabulary ('schools encourage').