Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid filler words like 'like' and 'I mean'. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details with linking words to improve coherence. For example, mention the types of shoes you own and your buying frequency clearly without redundancy.

예시: I don't buy shoes very often; I usually purchase new ones only when my old shoes wear out. For instance, I have four types: sneakers, running shoes, and exercise shoes. Whenever any of these get worn, I replace them.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas logically. Be specific about your experience and feelings towards buying shoes online.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online; however, I am not a big fan because sometimes the products don't arrive as shown, and I have faced sizing problems. Therefore, I prefer buying shoes in stores where I can try them on first.

제안: Make your answer more direct and avoid filler phrases like 'like' and 'you know'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific details about your spending habits.

예시: I usually spend a small amount on shoes because I only replace them when they wear out. On average, I spend about $100 per year on new shoes.

제안: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly to connect your ideas. Provide a complete explanation with specific reasons for your preference.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort is essential for daily activities. For example, I choose sneakers since they provide good cushioning, which helps when I walk or stand for long periods.

× I do have like, uh, four kinds of shoes already, one sneakers, one for running and one for exercises.

✓ I do have like, uh, four kinds of shoes already: one pair of sneakers, one for running, and one for exercise.

The phrase 'one sneakers' is incorrect because 'sneakers' is plural. It should be 'one pair of sneakers' to correctly express a single set of shoes. Also, 'exercises' should be singular 'exercise' when referring to the activity type.

× I already have like three kinds of shoes and I only replace them when the others won out.

✓ I already have like three kinds of shoes and I only replace them when the others worn out.

The phrase 'won out' is incorrect here; the correct past participle of 'wear' is 'worn'. The sentence should use 'worn out' to indicate the shoes are used up and need replacement.

× I'd rather prefer to buy them at shop before trying.

✓ I'd rather prefer to buy them at the shop before trying them on.

The phrase 'at shop' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, 'trying' should be 'trying them on' to correctly express trying shoes before buying.

× So I usually I'm I'm really hesitant to buy shoes online.

✓ So I usually, I'm really hesitant to buy shoes online.

The repetition 'I'm I'm' is a redundancy and should be corrected to a single 'I'm' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I prefer com comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes as a comfort is essential for daily wear.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes as comfort is essential for daily wear.

The word 'com' is a typo and should be removed. Also, 'a comfort' is incorrect; 'comfort' is an uncountable noun here and should be used without an article.