Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 내용이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 구체적인 이유나 예시를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes because they are essential for different activities. For example, I wear casual shoes when I walk on the street and running shoes when I go jogging.

제안: 답변에 불필요한 말버릇('uh')이 많고, 문장 구조가 부자연스럽습니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 말하는 연습과 함께, 이유를 좀 더 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is more convenient and saves time compared to shopping in physical stores.

제안: 문법 오류가 많고, 문장이 길고 중복되는 표현이 있습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 구체적인 금액이나 빈도를 명확히 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: I don't buy shoes very often, but when I do, I usually spend around 50 to 100 dollars on a good pair.

제안: 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 있으며, 표현이 부자연스럽습니다. 선호 이유를 명확히 하고, 적절한 어휘를 사용하여 문장을 자연스럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often go running, so it's important to wear shoes that support my feet well.

× For instance when I walking to the street I can wear or wear the shoes and then when I go to running we can also.

✓ For instance, when I am walking to the street, I can wear the shoes, and then when I go running, we can also.

The verb 'walking' should be used with the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense ('I am walking'). Also, 'go to running' is incorrect; it should be 'go running' without 'to'. This is because 'go' is followed by the gerund form of the verb without 'to'.

× I prefer to comfortable shoes, that's because I often do running, so it's important to the kind of shoes.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes, that's because I often go running, so the kind of shoes is important.

The phrase 'prefer to comfortable shoes' is incorrect; 'prefer' is directly followed by the noun without 'to'. Also, 'do running' is unnatural; the correct expression is 'go running'. Additionally, 'it's important to the kind of shoes' should be 'the kind of shoes is important' to match subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage.

× So I would like to say the computer shoes is good to me.

✓ So I would like to say the computer shoes are good for me.

The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'good to me' should be 'good for me' to correctly express suitability.

× Yes, I like buying shoes it it have a lot of benefits.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes because it has a lot of benefits.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper conjunctions and has a repeated word 'it'. Also, 'have' should be 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Adding 'because' clarifies the reason and improves sentence structure.

× I don't buying shoes often, but uh, when I go to department store with my family, when I look the shoes, it looks pretty good.

✓ I don't buy shoes often, but when I go to the department store with my family, when I look at the shoes, they look pretty good.

'Don't buying' is incorrect; the correct form is 'don't buy' because 'do' is followed by the base verb. Also, 'look the shoes' should be 'look at the shoes' because 'look' requires the preposition 'at' when referring to objects. 'It looks' should be 'they look' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'.