Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法の誤りを直し、より自然な表現を使いましょう。また、理由を明確にし、具体的な例を簡潔に述べることが大切です。例えば、「I prefer to buy shoes once a month to keep up with the latest shoe technology. For example, Nike releases new models every month.」のように言えます。

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually buy a new pair once a month to keep up with the latest technology. For example, Nike releases new models every month.

제안: 文法と語順を改善し、理由をより明確に述べましょう。例えば、「I have bought running shoes online because it is convenient and saves time.」のように言えます。

예시: Yes, I have bought running shoes online because it is convenient and saves me time.

제안: 金額の表現を自然にし、理由を簡潔に述べましょう。例えば、「I usually spend over 100,000 yen a month on running shoes because I run regularly and need to replace them often.」のように言えます。

예시: I usually spend over 100,000 yen a month on running shoes because I run regularly and need to replace them often.

제안: 文法と語順を改善し、理由を明確に述べましょう。例えば、「I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I walk long distances every day, so I want to avoid feeling tired.」のように言えます。

예시: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I walk long distances every day, so I want to avoid feeling tired.

× Yes, I prefer buy a pair of shoes.

✓ Yes, I prefer buying a pair of shoes.

The verb 'prefer' is followed by a verb in the '-ing' form when expressing general preferences. Therefore, 'buy' should be changed to 'buying'.

× I usually buy it once a month because I want to catch up new technology of shoes.

✓ I usually buy them once a month because I want to catch up with new shoe technology.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to 'a pair of shoes' in general; 'them' is appropriate for plural. Also, 'catch up' requires the preposition 'with', and 'new technology of shoes' is better expressed as 'new shoe technology'.

× For example, the Nike produced new shoes every month.

✓ For example, Nike produces new shoes every month.

The article 'the' before 'Nike' is unnecessary because 'Nike' is a proper noun. Also, the verb tense should be present simple 'produces' to indicate a habitual action.

× Yes, I have bought a new running shoes at once on website because it is beneficial for me.

✓ Yes, I have bought new running shoes at once on a website because it is beneficial for me.

The article 'a' is incorrect before the plural noun 'shoes'. Also, 'on website' requires the article 'a' to become 'on a website'.

× I usually spend the money for running shoes more than 100,000 Japanese yen once a month.

✓ I usually spend more than 100,000 Japanese yen on running shoes once a month.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'spend' is followed by the amount and then 'on' the item. Also, the word order is adjusted for clarity.

× Definitely, I love the comfortable shoes because I usually work much distance every day so to avoid to be tired I tend to wear the comfortable shoes.

✓ Definitely, I love comfortable shoes because I usually walk long distances every day, so to avoid getting tired, I tend to wear comfortable shoes.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'comfortable shoes' when speaking generally. 'Work much distance' is incorrect; it should be 'walk long distances'. Also, 'to avoid to be tired' is incorrect; it should be 'to avoid getting tired'.