Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, specify the frequency more naturally and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I like to wear attractive ones. I usually purchase new shoes about twice a year, especially when I find styles I like.

제안: Work on fluency by avoiding hesitations and improve grammar. Use linking words to explain your caution more clearly.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online before, but I am always very careful because I don't want to deal with returns if the size doesn't fit.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by linking ideas and providing a reason for your spending habits.

예시: I usually spend between $100 and $200 on shoes, particularly during sales like Boxing Day, because I can get good deals then.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve word choice. Use linking words to contrast your preferences clearly.

예시: To be honest, I like both fashionable and comfortable shoes; however, I prefer comfortable ones since I walk a lot and comfort is essential.

× Yes, I do. I like I like to wear pretty shoes, so I often buy shoes. Maybe two times in a year I buy.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to wear pretty shoes, so I often buy shoes. Maybe twice a year I buy them.

The phrase 'two times in a year' is grammatically awkward; 'twice a year' is the correct expression for frequency. Also, 'I like I like' is a repetition error and should be corrected to 'I like'. Additionally, 'Maybe two times in a year I buy' is an incorrect word order; it should be 'Maybe twice a year I buy them' or 'I buy them twice a year'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes I have I but I will be very careful when I buy shoes in online because I don't want to return if the size is wrong.

✓ Yes, I have, but I will be very careful when I buy shoes online because I don't want to return them if the size is wrong.

The preposition 'in' before 'online' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'buy shoes online'. Also, the sentence is missing a comma after 'Yes, I have' and 'return' should be followed by the object 'them' to clarify what is being returned. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Yes I have I but I will be very careful when I buy shoes in online because I don't want to return if the size is wrong.

✓ Yes, I have, but I will be very careful when I buy shoes online because I don't want to return them if the size is wrong.

The pronoun 'them' is missing after 'return' to specify what is being returned. Including 'them' clarifies the object of the verb 'return' and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Around $100 to $200, especially when it's on sale like Boxing Day. I would choose that time.

✓ Around $100 to $200, especially when it's on sale, like on Boxing Day. I would choose that time.

The phrase 'like Boxing Day' needs the preposition 'on' to indicate the time correctly: 'like on Boxing Day'. Adding commas improves readability. This correction aligns with standard English prepositional usage for dates and events.

× To be honest I like both type of shoes but I would choose comfortable shoes because I walk walk a lot so comfortableness is important.

✓ To be honest, I like both types of shoes, but I would choose comfortable shoes because I walk a lot, so comfort is important.

The phrase 'both type of shoes' should be 'both types of shoes' to agree in number. The word 'comfortableness' is awkward; 'comfort' is the more natural noun form. Also, 'walk walk' is a repetition error and should be corrected to 'walk'. Adding commas improves sentence flow. These changes correct number agreement, word choice, and remove repetition.