Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by saying, "I like buying shoes about two or three times every six months." Also, avoid redundancy and keep the answer concise.

예시: I enjoy buying shoes about two or three times every six months, depending on my needs and preferences.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. You could say, "Yes, I bought snow shoes online from an app website two months ago." This is clearer and more natural.

예시: Yes, I purchased snow shoes online through an app about two months ago, and the experience was quite convenient.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to be more concise and structured, for example: "The amount I spend on shoes depends on sales and my mood. If there is a sale and I need the shoes, I usually buy them."

예시: The money I spend on shoes varies; I usually buy them during sales or when I really feel like I need a new pair.

제안: Try to avoid hesitations and improve sentence flow. You could say: "I mostly prefer comfortable shoes for casual outings and work, but I wear fashionable shoes only on special occasions like birthdays and weddings."

예시: I usually choose comfortable shoes for everyday activities and work, but I reserve fashionable shoes for special events such as birthday parties and weddings.

× Yes, I like to buy shoes on maybe two or three times within six month.

✓ Yes, I like to buy shoes maybe two or three times within six months.

The word 'month' should be plural 'months' because it refers to a period longer than one month. Also, the preposition 'on' is unnecessary before 'maybe'.

× Yes, two months ago I I bought snow shoes from online app website and yeah, I bought it from there.

✓ Yes, two months ago I bought snow shoes from an online app website, and yeah, I bought them from there.

The repetition of 'I' is an error. 'Snow shoes' should be 'snowshoes' or 'snow shoes' as a compound noun, but it's acceptable. 'From online app website' needs an article 'an' before 'online app website'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' because 'shoes' is plural.

× If it's there is a sale then I definitely purchase a shoes if if I I need that, that.

✓ If there is a sale, then I definitely purchase shoes if I need them.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not have the singular article 'a'. Also, 'if if I I' is a repetition error. 'That, that' is unclear and unnecessary. 'Them' is used to refer back to 'shoes'.

× Mostly I per prefer comfortable shoes but I wear it on a casual uh, casualty outings and on a work.

✓ Mostly I prefer comfortable shoes, but I wear them on casual outings and at work.

The word 'per' is a typo and should be removed. 'Casualty outings' is incorrect; it should be 'casual outings'. The preposition 'on' is incorrect before 'a work'; it should be 'at work'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural 'shoes'.

× But for if. If you're talking about fashionable shoes, then I only wear it on a special event like birthday celebrations and marriages.

✓ But if you're talking about fashionable shoes, then I only wear them at special events like birthday celebrations and weddings.

The phrase 'But for if.' is unnecessary and confusing. 'It' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'shoes'. The preposition 'on' should be 'at' before 'special events'. 'Marriages' is better expressed as 'weddings' in this context.