Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Also, directly answer the frequency part of the question to fully address it. For example, mention how often you buy shoes and why.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, especially when I find a good deal or a style that catches my eye. I usually buy shoes a few times a year, depending on my needs and sales.

제안: Be careful with accuracy and clarity; the mention of 'watches' seems off-topic. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, explain why you enjoy buying shoes online and mention any drawbacks clearly.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online and I actually enjoy it more than shopping in stores because it's convenient and offers more variety. However, sometimes the shoes don't fit as expected, which can be disappointing.

제안: Provide a clearer and more specific answer by mentioning the currency and typical price range. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'up to 100' without specifying the currency.

예시: It depends on the brand, but I usually spend between $50 and $100 on a pair of shoes, depending on their quality and style.

제안: Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to improve coherence and clarify your preferences.

예시: I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes depending on the occasion. For formal events, I wear fashionable shoes, but when hanging out with friends, I choose comfort.

× Yes, of course I have watches online and actually I enjoy buying shoes online even more than buying it in a shop or somewhere.

✓ Yes, of course I have bought shoes online and actually I enjoy buying shoes online even more than buying them in a shop or somewhere.

The verb 'watches' is incorrect here; the past participle form 'bought' should be used with 'have' to form the present perfect tense. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to correctly refer to the plural noun 'shoes'.

× Yes, of course I have watches online and actually I enjoy buying shoes online even more than buying it in a shop or somewhere.

✓ Yes, of course I have bought shoes online and actually I enjoy buying shoes online even more than buying them in a shop or somewhere.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because it refers to a singular noun, but 'shoes' is plural. The correct pronoun is 'them' to match the plural noun.

× And I know that it's not really good things to do because sometimes online shopping can be really, umm, unexpected.

✓ And I know that it's not really a good thing to do because sometimes online shopping can be really, umm, unexpected.

The phrase 'not really good things' is incorrect; it should be 'not really a good thing' to correctly express the idea as a singular concept. Also, 'things' is plural and does not fit here.

× Well, it depends on what kind of shoes brands I'm buying because sometimes it can be up to 100 and sometimes it can be less than 100.

✓ Well, it depends on what kind of shoe brands I'm buying because sometimes it can be up to 100 and sometimes it can be less than 100.

The phrase 'shoes brands' is incorrect; the correct form is 'shoe brands' because 'shoe' acts as an adjective describing the type of brands.

× Well, I own both fashionable shoes and also comfortable shoes and it depends on my mood because when whenever I'm going to somewhere fancy I always wear fashionable shoes and whenever I'm going outside to hang out with my friends I always rather to choose comfortable shoes.

✓ Well, I own both fashionable shoes and also comfortable shoes and it depends on my mood because whenever I'm going somewhere fancy I always wear fashionable shoes and whenever I'm going outside to hang out with my friends I always prefer to choose comfortable shoes.

The phrase 'going to somewhere' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'going somewhere' without 'to'. Also, 'always rather to choose' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'always prefer to choose' to express preference.