Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'I only buy when I need it is necessary for my occasion at that time,' say 'I only buy shoes when I need them for a special occasion.'

예시: I don't buy shoes very often because I only purchase them when I need them for a special occasion. For instance, I recently bought high heels to wear to a dinner party.

제안: Your answer has good content but contains some unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and clarify your points. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, replace 'online pet form' with 'online platform' and say 'because it is convenient and saves time.'

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because it is convenient and saves time. I don't have to go to the store, and I can shop easily from home when I'm busy.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and lacks proper sentence structure. Try to give a clear and complete answer with linking words. For example, say 'I usually spend at least 300 baht per pair, but sometimes I spend up to 4,000 or 5,000 baht on shoes.'

예시: I usually spend at least 300 baht on a pair of shoes, but sometimes I spend as much as 4,000 or 5,000 baht for higher quality ones.

제안: Your answer has several grammar and clarity issues. Try to form clear sentences and explain your reasons with linking words. For example, say 'I prefer comfortable shoes because I have to work a lot, and comfortable shoes help protect my feet.'

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I have to work long hours, and comfortable shoes help protect my feet and keep me safe.

× I'm not the person who buys the shoes often because I only buy when I need it is necessary for my occasion at that time.

✓ I'm not the person who buys shoes often because I only buy when it is necessary for my occasion at that time.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used before 'is necessary'. The correct structure is 'when it is necessary'. Also, 'the shoes' should be 'shoes' as a general statement without 'the'.

× For example, I buy high heels because I need to wear for a dinner.

✓ For example, I buy high heels because I need to wear them for a dinner.

The verb 'wear' requires an object, so 'them' (referring to high heels) should be included. Also, 'for a dinner' is correct but 'to a dinner' is more common; however, 'for a dinner' is acceptable here.

× Of course, I've bought shoes online many times because it's comfortable, I don't have to go to the convenience store, uh, and when I don't have enough time, I just bought it via the online pet form and it's easy to.

✓ Of course, I've bought shoes online many times because it's convenient, I don't have to go to the store, and when I don't have enough time, I just buy them via the online platform and it's easy too.

'Comfortable' is incorrect here; 'convenient' is the right adjective for ease of use. 'Convenience store' is a specific type of store, likely not intended here. 'Pet form' is a typo; it should be 'platform'. 'Bought' should be 'buy' to maintain present tense consistency. 'It' should be 'them' referring to shoes. 'Easy to' should be 'easy too' to mean 'also easy'.

× I didn't count before so it's usually. 300 per pair at least and it goes highest maybe 4 or 5000 baht.

✓ I haven't counted before, but it's usually at least 300 baht per pair and can go as high as maybe 4,000 or 5,000 baht.

'Didn't count before' is better expressed as 'haven't counted before' for experience up to now. The sentence structure is fragmented and unclear; it needs rephrasing for clarity. 'It goes highest maybe' is incorrect; 'can go as high as' is correct. Also, numbers should be clear and consistent.

× As my career right now I would prefer comfortable shoes because I have to work to work so comfortable. She helps a lot and is safe my feet.

✓ As for my career right now, I would prefer comfortable shoes because I have to work a lot, so comfort is important. They help a lot and keep my feet safe.

'She' is incorrectly used to refer to shoes; the correct pronoun is 'they'. 'Work to work so comfortable' is ungrammatical; it should be 'work a lot, so comfort is important'. 'Is safe my feet' is incorrect; it should be 'keep my feet safe'.