Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite natural and shows enthusiasm, but try to avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'stay focused' which is confusing here. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say how often you buy shoes and why, clearly and concisely.

예시: Yes, I love buying shoes and usually purchase new pairs every two to three months because I enjoy having comfortable and stylish footwear that suits different occasions.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to use linking words like 'because' and 'so' more effectively to improve coherence. Also, avoid repeating the same idea and try to use varied vocabulary, for example, instead of 'shoe shop' you can say 'physical store'.

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online because there is a risk of ordering the wrong size. Therefore, I prefer visiting a physical store where I can try the shoes and check their material before buying.

제안: Your answer conveys your opinion well, but try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words such as 'because' and 'so'.

예시: I usually spend a considerable amount of money on shoes because I believe quality is more important than quantity. Therefore, I prefer buying expensive shoes that last longer.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid short answers and filler words like 'uh'. Use a full sentence as a topic sentence and add supporting details with linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because fashion trends change quickly, but comfort is important for my daily activities and lasts longer.

× I buy them in every two to three months as I like to stay focused, comfortable and crazy with my footwear.

✓ I buy them every two to three months as I like to stay focused, comfortable and crazy with my footwear.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used before a time expression here. The correct phrase is 'every two to three months' without 'in'. Using 'in' suggests a location or a point within a period, which is not appropriate in this context.

× No, I never prefer buying my shoes online because online shopping can have a lot of size mistakes.

✓ No, I never prefer to buy my shoes online because online shopping can have a lot of size mistakes.

The verb 'prefer' is usually followed by the infinitive form 'to buy' rather than the gerund 'buying' when expressing preference. Using 'prefer to buy' is grammatically correct and more natural in this context.

× So I prefer to go on the shoe shop to get my shoes because there I can get the exact size I can check the material of the shoes.

✓ So I prefer to go to the shoe shop to get my shoes because there I can get the exact size and check the material of the shoes.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'go' and 'shoe shop'. The correct preposition is 'to' when indicating movement towards a place. Also, 'and' is needed to connect the two clauses properly.