Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや言葉の繰り返しがあり、内容が不明瞭です。より自然で明確な表現を使い、具体的な頻度や理由を加えると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't do it very often. When I do, I carefully consider which shoes suit my needs best.

제안: 回答が不完全で、意味が伝わりにくいです。過去の経験を具体的に説明し、現在の状況や意見を明確に述べることが必要です。

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. However, I found some pairs uncomfortable, so recently I prefer buying shoes in physical stores.

제안: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が分かりにくいです。金額の説明と理由を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

예시: I usually spend around $200 on shoes because I prefer comfortable and durable ones. I believe good shoes help me go to good places, so I don't mind paying more.

제안: 回答が途中で終わっており、文法的な誤りもあります。理由を明確に述べ、文を完結させることが必要です。

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I enjoy walking. Comfortable shoes make it easier for me to walk long distances without pain.

× I don't buy it very often, but when I choose shoes, I consider carefully to which which shoes I want and.

✓ I don't buy them very often, but when I choose shoes, I consider carefully which shoes I want.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural, so 'them' should be used instead. Also, the phrase 'to which which shoes I want and' is awkward and contains a repeated word; it should be simplified to 'which shoes I want.'

× When I bought it I noticed it was uh, uncomfortable then uh, so recently I buy it uh uh.

✓ When I bought them, I noticed they were uncomfortable then, so recently I have been buying them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'shoes'; 'them' should be used. The verb tense shifts incorrectly from past to present; 'buy' should be in present perfect continuous 'have been buying' to indicate recent repeated action. Also, 'they were uncomfortable' is correct past tense for plural subject.

× I spent around $200 on shoes I I especially like comfortable and durable and I believe good shoes takes me good places so even if it's expensive I choose I want.

✓ I usually spend around $200 on shoes. I especially like comfortable and durable ones, and I believe good shoes take me to good places, so even if they're expensive, I choose what I want.

The verb 'spent' is past tense but the question asks about usual spending, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate. 'Takes' should be 'take' to agree with plural 'shoes.' Also, sentence structure is improved by splitting into clearer sentences and correcting pronouns and articles.

× I especially like comfortable and durable and I believe good shoes takes me good places so even if it's expensive I choose I want.

✓ I especially like comfortable and durable shoes, and I believe good shoes take me to good places, so even if they're expensive, I choose what I want.

Missing noun after 'comfortable and durable' causes confusion; adding 'shoes' clarifies meaning. 'It's expensive' should be 'they're expensive' to agree with plural 'shoes.' 'Choose I want' is incomplete; 'choose what I want' is correct.

× It is because I like walking so it is important for me to work easily and comfortable shoes is sustainable.

✓ It is because I like walking, so it is important for me to walk easily, and comfortable shoes are sustainable.

'Work easily' is incorrect; it should be 'walk easily' to match context. 'Comfortable shoes is' should be 'comfortable shoes are' to agree with plural subject. The sentence is improved by adding commas for clarity.