Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve grammatical accuracy, for example, use 'I buy shoes almost every two months' instead of 'I used to bought'. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question without unnecessary details.

예시: Yes, I love buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair every two months, especially after completing important milestones. Currently, I work as a pharmacist and I use my salary to treat myself with new shoes.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'I think', be more confident and use linking words like 'Moreover' or 'Additionally' to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online. Last month, I purchased a pair of Nike shoes which fit perfectly. Moreover, the quality was excellent, so I definitely prefer buying shoes from online platforms.

제안: Avoid repeating the same information and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, be precise and avoid unnecessary phrases like 'that's an interesting topic'.

예시: I usually spend around ₹3000 on a pair of shoes. For instance, last month I bought a pair for ₹2800, and I was satisfied with both the quality and the fit.

제안: Avoid filler phrases like 'that's an interesting topic' and unclear words like 'gency kid'. Use clear, concise sentences and avoid repetition. Also, explain your preference with reasons using linking words.

예시: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable. Since I love fashion, I like to stay updated with trends, but comfort is more important for me when choosing shoes.

× I think by almost every two months I used to bought a shoe for myself after completing my course and I have, uh, currently working as a pharmacist.

✓ I think almost every two months I used to buy a shoe for myself after completing my course and I am currently working as a pharmacist.

The phrase 'used to bought' is incorrect because 'used to' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the past tense. Also, 'I have, uh, currently working' is incorrect; it should be 'I am currently working' to indicate present continuous tense.

× I think the last month I bought a Nike shoes from the online platform and I think that was the perfect pair.

✓ I think last month I bought a pair of Nike shoes from an online platform and I think that was the perfect pair.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so it should be preceded by 'a pair of' to indicate one set. Also, 'the last month' should be 'last month' for natural expression. 'The online platform' is better as 'an online platform' unless a specific platform is known.

× I think I spent about ₹3000 for buying a pair of shoes. As I told earlier, I bought a shoe. I bought a pair of shoe during the last month and it cost about ₹2800 and the quality and the fitting was good.

✓ I think I spent about ₹3000 buying a pair of shoes. As I told earlier, I bought a pair of shoes last month and it cost about ₹2800. The quality and the fitting were good.

The phrase 'a pair of shoe' is incorrect; it should be 'a pair of shoes' because 'pair' refers to two items. Also, 'the fitting was good' should be 'the fitting were good' because 'quality and fitting' is a compound subject requiring plural verb.

× So I'm a gency kid, I love fashion and I always wanted to be updated and comfortability is the more important thing.

✓ So I'm a fancy kid, I love fashion and I always want to be updated, and comfort is the more important thing.

The word 'gency' is likely a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'fancy'. 'Comfortability' is not commonly used; 'comfort' is the correct noun. Also, 'I always wanted' should be 'I always want' to match present tense context.

× So definitely I will I will buy a shoe that is both fashionable as well as comfortable and also I will.

✓ So definitely I will buy shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable.

The sentence is repetitive and incomplete. 'I will I will' is redundant. Also, 'a shoe' should be plural 'shoes' to match general preference. The phrase 'as well as' is better replaced with 'and' for clarity and conciseness.