Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'so', you can use 'because' or 'therefore'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they are both comfortable and stylish. I usually buy new pairs every month to suit different occasions, so I like to have a variety in my wardrobe.

제안: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect in parts. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use correct verb forms. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' properly to connect your reasons. Avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I recently bought shoes online because it offers better deals than offline stores. Also, I received coupons that gave me additional discounts when I bought more shoes.

제안: Your answer has some unclear parts and repetition ('because IP because'). Try to avoid repeating words and clarify your points. Use linking words like 'because' and 'which' correctly to explain your reasons.

예시: I usually spend a reasonable amount on shoes because I prefer branded ones. They are more comfortable for walking and last longer, which makes them worth the investment.

제안: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas clearly with correct grammar. Use linking words like 'but' and 'if' properly. Complete your sentences to express your preferences clearly.

예시: It depends on the situation. I prefer comfortable shoes for daily use, but if I am going to a festival or special occasion, I like to wear fashionable shoes.

× I usually buy new shoes every month, suitable for different occasions, so there's an important part of my wardrobe, so I like to have a variety to choose from.

✓ I usually buy new shoes every month, suitable for different occasions, because they are an important part of my wardrobe, so I like to have a variety to choose from.

The original sentence has a sentence structure error due to the incorrect use of 'so' and missing subject for the clause 'there's an important part of my wardrobe'. The correction adds 'because they are' to clarify the meaning and connect the ideas properly.

× Yeah, I recently bought shoes online because it gives a better deal than offline and also give some kind of a coupon to further more discount whenever I bought but buy another shoes so that.

✓ Yeah, I recently bought shoes online because it gives a better deal than offline and also gives some kind of coupon for further discount whenever I buy another pair of shoes.

The original sentence has modal verb and verb form errors: 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'it', and 'bought but buy' is incorrect and confusing. Also, 'another shoes' is incorrect plural usage. The correction fixes verb agreement and clarifies the sentence.

× Personally, I like to spend a reasonable amount of money on shoes because IP because I prefer branded shoes.

✓ Personally, I like to spend a reasonable amount of money on shoes because I prefer branded shoes.

The phrase 'because IP because' is a typographical or sentence structure error. Removing the extra 'IP because' corrects the sentence.

× It depends upon on situation, but if I person before comfortable shoes rather than fashionable shoes, if I want to go somewhere for for somewhere to festival or any occasion, I like to wear fashionable. But if I daily use I use.

✓ It depends on the situation, but I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones. If I want to go somewhere for a festival or any occasion, I like to wear fashionable shoes. But for daily use, I use comfortable shoes.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure errors, including incorrect prepositions ('upon on'), unclear phrases ('if I person before'), repeated words ('for for somewhere to'), and incomplete sentences. The correction restructures the sentences for clarity and grammatical correctness.