Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and unnecessary phrases. Try to start directly with your main point and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't buy shoes very often; usually, I purchase one or two pairs a year to suit different seasons. For example, I buy winter boots to keep my feet warm during cold weather.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to make the response more coherent and natural. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases and try to be more concise.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online, particularly training or running sneakers. I usually browse several websites to find a pair I like, compare prices, and then make a purchase.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to structure your sentences more clearly and use linking words to explain your reasons. Also, avoid repetition and ensure your vocabulary is accurate.

예시: I don't buy shoes frequently, so I prefer to invest in high-quality pairs. Usually, I spend around €100 or more because I want shoes that are durable and comfortable, so they last a long time.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains hesitations and contradictions. Try to give a direct response to the question, explain your preference clearly, and avoid filler words. Use linking words to organise your ideas logically.

예시: I always prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day, and they help prevent pain. Besides, I don't focus much on fashion, so comfort is more important to me.

× I tend to search the entire website to find something I like and then I will compare the prices from different websites and eventually I will make a purchase.

✓ I tend to search the entire website to find something I like and then I will compare the prices on different websites and eventually I will make a purchase.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used with 'prices'. The correct preposition to indicate the source of prices on websites is 'on'. Therefore, 'compare the prices from different websites' should be 'compare the prices on different websites'.

× Usually I spend around €100 or even more because I prefer shoes than are durable and comfortable and so that they could last long.

✓ Usually I spend around €100 or even more because I prefer shoes that are durable and comfortable so that they can last long.

The phrase 'prefer shoes than are durable' is incorrect. The correct relative pronoun is 'that' to introduce the clause describing the shoes. Also, 'so that they could last long' should be 'so that they can last long' to express ability or possibility in the present/future. Additionally, 'last long' is acceptable but 'last a long time' would be more natural.

× I would always choose comfortable shoes or fashionable shoes because I need to walk a lot daily so then I really need a pair of shoes and could take me from pain.

✓ I would always choose comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I need to walk a lot daily, so I really need a pair of shoes that can prevent pain.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'Or' should be replaced with 'rather than' to show preference. The phrase 'could take me from pain' is incorrect; it should be 'that can prevent pain' or 'that protect me from pain'. Also, the sentence needs better punctuation and structure for clarity.

× Umm Second of all, I think I just don't care about my appearance so much umm so I just want to make myself relax.

✓ Secondly, I think I just don't care about my appearance so much, so I just want to make myself feel relaxed.

The phrase 'Second of all' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'Secondly'. Also, 'make myself relax' is incorrect; it should be 'make myself feel relaxed' or 'relax myself'. The sentence also benefits from proper punctuation for clarity.