Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, explain why you like buying shoes and how often you do it, using linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they help complete my outfit. I usually buy new shoes a few times a year, especially when I find a style that suits me or when my old shoes wear out.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more coherent and natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Be more specific about your experience with online shoe shopping.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it offers a wider variety of styles. Moreover, online shopping helps me keep up with current trends without having to visit stores in person.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Be specific and realistic about the amount you spend, and explain your reasoning clearly. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: The amount I spend on shoes depends on my budget, but usually I spend around $50 to $100. I think it's important not to spend too much money on shoes to save for other needs.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by making it more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect your reasons and avoid repetition. Also, correct minor grammatical errors.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often walk and stand for long periods. Therefore, comfort is more important to me than fashion when choosing shoes.

× I love buying the shoes because I feel like the person style it has to style your outfit and occasionally I buy the shoes when I feel like it needed to have it.

✓ I love buying shoes because I feel like a person's style has to style your outfit, and occasionally I buy shoes when I feel like I need to have them.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'shoes' when speaking generally. Also, 'the person style it' is incorrect; it should be 'a person's style'. Additionally, 'needed to have it' should be 'need to have them' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Use 'a' for singular countable nouns when referring to a non-specific person, and omit 'the' when speaking about things in general.

× Yes I buy shoes online as well and the online shopping give us more choice to buy from different style and also give you sense what trend is going on in the market so you don't have to go out and search for your outfits.

✓ Yes, I buy shoes online as well, and online shopping gives us more choices to buy different styles and also gives you a sense of what trend is going on in the market, so you don't have to go out and search for your outfits.

Subject-verb agreement requires 'gives' instead of 'give' because the subject 'online shopping' is singular. 'Choice' should be plural 'choices' to match the context. 'Different style' should be 'different styles' to agree in number. Also, 'give you sense' should be 'gives you a sense' to be grammatically correct.

× The money I spend on the shoe is depend on my budget mostly.

✓ The money I spend on shoes depends mostly on my budget.

The verb 'depend' should be in the third person singular present tense 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'money'. Also, 'on the shoe' should be 'on shoes' to refer generally to shoes. The adverb 'mostly' is better placed after the verb for natural flow.

× I usually spend around $5200. So I feel like spending too much money on the shoe is also not a good for you.

✓ I usually spend around $5200. So I feel like spending too much money on shoes is also not good for you.

'On the shoe' should be 'on shoes' to refer generally. The phrase 'not a good for you' is incorrect; it should be 'not good for you' without the article 'a'.

× My first preference always the comfortable shoes because I have to walk a lot so and secondly I have to stand for longer time so I feel like walking and standing is more comfortable on the comfortable shoes.

✓ My first preference is always comfortable shoes because I have to walk a lot, and secondly, I have to stand for a long time, so I feel like walking and standing are more comfortable in comfortable shoes.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'preference'. 'So and secondly' is awkward; 'and secondly' is sufficient. 'Longer time' should be 'a long time'. 'Walking and standing is' should be 'walking and standing are' to agree with the compound subject. 'On the comfortable shoes' should be 'in comfortable shoes' for correct preposition use.

× So I always choose the comfortable shoes over the fashion.

✓ So I always choose comfortable shoes over fashion.

'The comfortable shoes' and 'the fashion' are incorrect here because the speaker is speaking generally. Articles should be omitted when speaking about things in general, so 'comfortable shoes' and 'fashion' are correct.