Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answers clearer and more grammatically correct. Use simpler sentences and avoid repetition. Also, provide more specific reasons and examples to support your answer. For instance, explain why you like different colours and how often you wear them.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually buy a new pair every month. I enjoy wearing different colours because they match my outfits. For example, I always wear colourful shoes to birthday parties to look festive.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to sound more confident. Also, be careful with verb tenses and sentence endings. Provide a complete example and explain why online shopping is convenient for you.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because it is convenient and saves time. For example, I often buy shoes from Amazon because they have a wide selection and fast delivery.

제안: Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Be more specific about your budget and explain why you prefer online shopping with clear reasons.

예시: I usually spend about $100 a month on shoes because I enjoy buying them. I prefer shopping online, especially on eBay, because it is easy and convenient.

제안: Focus on clear and correct grammar, especially verb forms and word choice. Avoid repeating words like 'comfortable' too often. Give specific examples and explain why comfort is important to you.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me when I am working or walking. For example, I always wear comfortable shoes when I work in the kitchen because they keep my feet pain-free and supported.

× Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes which is I usually buy every month because I enjoy where I enjoy wearing different color of shoes.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, and I usually buy them every month because I enjoy wearing different colours of shoes.

The original sentence is a run-on with unclear structure and missing conjunctions. It also incorrectly uses 'which is' and 'where' in this context. The correction adds proper conjunctions and clarifies the meaning, improving sentence flow and coherence.

× For example I when I go to birthday I always use color shoes.

✓ For example, when I go to a birthday, I always wear colourful shoes.

The phrase 'go to birthday' is missing an article and 'use color shoes' is incorrect; 'wear colourful shoes' is the correct collocation. Adding 'a' before 'birthday' and changing 'use' to 'wear' corrects the prepositional and verb usage.

× I have purchased online many times because, uh, I think it's convenient and comfortable when I buy shoes.

✓ I have purchased shoes online many times because, uh, I think it's convenient and comfortable when I buy shoes.

The original sentence is mostly correct but missing the object 'shoes' after 'purchased'. Adding 'shoes' clarifies the sentence and maintains correct past tense usage.

× For example, I usually bought shoes from the Amazon, which makes me umm.

✓ For example, I usually buy shoes from Amazon, which makes it easy for me.

'Usually bought' mixes past tense with a habitual action, which should be in present tense 'usually buy'. Also, 'the Amazon' is incorrect; 'Amazon' is a proper noun without 'the'. The phrase 'which makes me umm' is incomplete and unclear, so it is corrected to 'which makes it easy for me' for clarity.

× Well, I actually have budget for UMM buying shoes around $100 a month because I really enjoy UMM buying shoes.

✓ Well, I actually have a budget of around $100 a month for buying shoes because I really enjoy buying shoes.

The original sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'budget' and misuses 'for UMM buying shoes'. The correction adds the article and rephrases for clarity and correct quantifier usage.

× I really enjoy buying shoes from the online.

✓ I really enjoy buying shoes online.

The phrase 'from the online' is incorrect. 'Online' is an adverb here and does not require a preposition or article. Removing 'from the' corrects the prepositional error.

× For example, I usually buying shoes from the eBay which make me easy and convenient.

✓ For example, I usually buy shoes from eBay, which makes it easy and convenient for me.

'Usually buying' is incorrect; it should be 'usually buy' to indicate habitual action. 'The eBay' is incorrect; 'eBay' does not take 'the'. The clause 'which make me easy and convenient' is ungrammatical and is corrected to 'which makes it easy and convenient for me' for clarity and correct subject-verb agreement.

× Well, I prefer wearing comfortable shoes because comfortable shoes give provide me convenience when I working or walking.

✓ Well, I prefer wearing comfortable shoes because comfortable shoes provide me with convenience when I am working or walking.

The phrase 'give provide me convenience' is redundant and incorrect; 'provide me with convenience' is correct. Also, 'when I working' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am'. The correction fixes these errors for proper verb usage and quantifier expression.

× For example, I usually go for comfortable shoot when I work in the kitchen that make me comfortable and convenient.

✓ For example, I usually go for comfortable shoes when I work in the kitchen, which makes me comfortable and is convenient.

'Comfortable shoot' is a typo and should be 'comfortable shoes'. The clause 'that make me comfortable and convenient' is ungrammatical; 'which makes me comfortable and is convenient' is correct. Adding a comma before 'which' improves sentence structure.