Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer should be more natural and clear. Avoid awkward phrases like 'as another people' and 'I used to this'. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because it makes me happy. I usually buy shoes about twice a year, mostly when I need new ones or when there is a sale.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by explaining why buying shoes online is hard for you. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific details.

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online because I find it difficult to choose the right size without trying them on. Also, I prefer to see the shoes in person before buying.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing words like 'fentanyl' and 'haunted'. Please use clear and relevant vocabulary. Start with a direct answer and then add specific details about your spending habits using linking words.

예시: I usually spend between 100 and 150 dollars on shoes, depending on the brand and quality. Sometimes I spend more if the shoes are very comfortable or fashionable.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Make your answer more natural and clear by directly stating your preference and giving specific reasons with linking words.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because they are easier to wear for long periods. For example, when I walk or stand a lot, comfortable shoes help me avoid pain.

× As another people I like so much this job because it makes me happy.

✓ Like other people, I like this job very much because it makes me happy.

The phrase 'another people' is incorrect because 'people' is plural and 'another' is used with singular nouns. The correct phrase is 'other people' to refer to multiple individuals. Also, the word order and phrasing were adjusted for natural English expression.

× So honestly I used to this twice a year.

✓ So honestly, I usually do this twice a year.

The phrase 'used to this' is incorrect. 'Used to' is followed by a base verb to indicate past habits, but here the meaning is about frequency. 'Usually do this' correctly expresses habitual action in the present. Also, 'used to' cannot be followed directly by 'this' without a verb.

× No, I have not because this is very hard for me.

✓ No, I have not because it is very hard for me.

The pronoun 'this' is incorrectly used to refer to the action of buying shoes online. The correct pronoun is 'it' to refer to a situation or action previously mentioned.

× Oh I do spend my money on shoes about fentanyl or haunted or from 100 to $150.00 it depends on.

✓ Oh, I usually spend about $100 to $150 on shoes; it depends.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect words like 'fentanyl' and 'haunted' which do not fit the context. The quantifier 'about' should precede the price range. The phrase 'it depends on' is incomplete and corrected to 'it depends' for clarity.

× Honestly, I do prefer comfortable shoes because uh, it is umm, more umm, easy for every people.

✓ Honestly, I prefer comfortable shoes because they are easier for everyone.

'Every people' is incorrect because 'people' is plural and 'every' is used with singular nouns. The correct phrase is 'everyone' to refer to all people. Also, 'it is more easy' is ungrammatical; the comparative form 'easier' is used instead.

× Uh, because of to feel ourself comfortable, yes.

✓ Because it makes us feel comfortable, yes.

'Ourself' is incorrect; the correct reflexive pronoun for 'us' is 'ourselves'. However, the phrase 'because of to feel' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence uses 'because it makes us feel comfortable' for clarity and correctness.