Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ содержит несколько грамматических ошибок и нечетко выраженные мысли. Следует избегать повторений и использовать правильные глагольные формы. Также важно отвечать прямо на вопрос и избегать лишних деталей, которые не связаны с темой.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes quite often because I enjoy shopping. However, I don't buy shoes very frequently due to budget constraints, but I hope to buy more in the future.

제안: Ответ содержит ошибки в использовании предлогов и глагольных форм. Рекомендуется использовать связующие слова для плавности речи и более точные выражения, чтобы сделать ответ более естественным и связным.

예시: Yes, I buy shoes online almost every time because I dislike going to physical stores. Online shopping is more convenient and saves me a lot of time.

제안: Ответ неясен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует использовать правильные выражения для описания расходов и ценностей, а также строить предложения логично и понятно.

예시: I usually spend a considerable amount of money on shoes because when I earn my own money, I start to appreciate its value more.

제안: В ответе много пауз и слов-паразитов, а также нечеткое выражение мысли. Рекомендуется говорить более уверенно, использовать связующие слова и более точные описания, чтобы сделать ответ более естественным и содержательным.

예시: That's an interesting question. I prefer fashionable shoes because I find them more attractive, and I enjoy expressing my style through my footwear.

× I like buy shoes but I don't eat often because I don't have enough money but I dream it to do more.

✓ I like buying shoes but I don't buy often because I don't have enough money but I dream of doing more.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'buying' instead of the base form 'buy'. Also, 'dream it to do more' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'dream of doing more'. Additionally, 'eat often' seems to be a mistake and should be 'buy often' to match the context.

× I dream it to do more.

✓ I dream of doing more.

The verb 'dream' is usually followed by the preposition 'of' and a gerund form, not an infinitive. Therefore, 'dream it to do more' is incorrect; it should be 'dream of doing more'.

× Honestly, because I hate to go in shop. I prefer buy in online.

✓ Honestly, because I hate going to shops. I prefer buying online.

The verb 'hate' is followed by a gerund, so 'hate to go' should be 'hate going'. Also, 'prefer' is followed by a gerund, so 'prefer buy' should be 'prefer buying'. The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; it should be 'to' or omitted. 'Shop' should be plural 'shops' to indicate general places.

× I prefer buy in online.

✓ I prefer buying online.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary and incorrect before 'online'. The correct phrase is 'buying online' without 'in'.

× I turned a lot of money on shoes because when I earn money myself, I start to more value for money.

✓ I spent a lot of money on shoes because when I earn money myself, I start to value money more.

The verb 'turned' is incorrect in this context; the correct past tense verb is 'spent'. Also, 'start to more value for money' is incorrect; it should be 'start to value money more'.

× I turned a lot of money on shoes because when I earn money myself, I start to more value for money.

✓ I spent a lot of money on shoes because when I earn money myself, I start to value money more.

The phrase 'more value for money' is incorrect; it should be 'value money more' to express the intended meaning.

× Uh, I think I prefer fashionable shoes because, uh, it's more beautiful and I like beauty scene.

✓ Uh, I think I prefer fashionable shoes because, uh, they are more beautiful and I like beautiful styles.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to 'shoes' (plural), so 'they' should be used. 'More beautiful' is correct, but 'beauty scene' is not a proper phrase; 'beautiful styles' or 'fashionable looks' would be better.