Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid unclear phrases like "the bigger, quite candid with you," and keep your answer concise and relevant. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite often, especially sneakers. I like to wear my favourite pair when I go to the gym because they are comfortable and suitable for sports.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by avoiding repetition and using more precise vocabulary. Instead of "comfy" to describe buying online, use words like "convenient". Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online, mainly from Amazon. I find it very convenient because the products arrive quickly and there is a wide variety to choose from.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations. Try to speak more confidently and directly. Also, clarify your points with specific examples and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: The amount I spend on shoes depends on their purpose. For sports shoes, I am willing to spend more because I need good quality, but for casual walking shoes, I prefer to spend less.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better sentence structure. Avoid repeating the same word "comfy" and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort makes wearing them more enjoyable. In my experience, shoes should have enough space and support to keep my feet comfortable throughout the day.

× Yeah, the bigger, quite candid with you.

✓ Yeah, to be quite candid with you, the bigger ones.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a proper subject and verb structure, making it difficult to understand. The correction provides a clearer and grammatically correct sentence by adding the phrase 'to be quite candid with you' and specifying 'the bigger ones' as the subject.

× I really like talking my favorite piece of sneakers.

✓ I really like talking about my favorite pair of sneakers.

The verb 'talking' requires the preposition 'about' to indicate the topic of discussion. Also, 'piece' is incorrect when referring to sneakers; 'pair' is the correct quantifier for shoes.

× I really like to wear them whenever I go to my gym to practice sport and I really find them quite great.

✓ I really like to wear them whenever I go to the gym to practice sports, and I find them quite great.

The phrase 'my gym' is less common; 'the gym' is more natural. Also, 'practice sport' should be 'practice sports' to indicate the activity generally. The sentence is also improved by adding a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× If it's a sports sticker, I would go and spend some money, Uh, but if it's just for walking, umm, I just uh, I don't bother with spending that much.

✓ If it's a sports sneaker, I would go and spend some money, but if it's just for walking, I don't bother spending that much.

The word 'sticker' is incorrect; it should be 'sneaker' to refer to sports shoes. Also, 'bother with spending' is better expressed as 'bother spending' for naturalness and correctness.

× I think as a more comfy the shoes the more enjoyable.

✓ I think the comfier the shoes, the more enjoyable.

The phrase 'as a more comfy' is incorrect. The comparative form 'comfier' should be used, and the sentence structure should follow the pattern 'the [comparative], the [comparative]' for clarity and correctness.