Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as 'big fan of buying shoes' and improve grammar by adding articles ('a big fan'). Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about why you like these fashion styles.

예시: Yes, I am a big fan of buying shoes and usually purchase them twice a week. I enjoy following street fashion trends and watching TikTok fashion shows, which greatly influence my style choices.

제안: Your answer has good content but needs grammatical corrections and more natural phrasing. Avoid filler words like 'Umm' and use linking words properly. Also, be more specific about what styles you like and why online shopping appeals to you.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online, about twice a week. I enjoy it because there is a wide variety of styles available, which allows me to find unique and eye-catching designs that suit my taste.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response more clearly by stating an approximate amount you usually spend, then giving a specific example. Avoid informal phrases like 'that's how I go' and improve sentence flow with linking words.

예시: I usually don't keep track of how much I spend on shoes, but last month, for my birthday, I spent about £100 on them. Although it might seem a lot, I really enjoy buying fashionable shoes.

제안: Your answer expresses your opinion clearly but could be more formal and structured. Avoid informal phrases like 'you know' and 'cause'. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific reasons or examples to support your preference.

예시: Personally, I definitely prefer fashionable shoes over comfortable ones because I love keeping up with the latest trends. For instance, I read fashion magazines twice a week, which gives me plenty of inspiration on how to style my shoes.

× I'm big fan of buying shoes.

✓ I'm a big fan of buying shoes.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun phrase 'big fan'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I like following fashion styles like street fashion or watching TikTok fashion show that really influenced me a lot.

✓ I like following fashion styles like street fashion or watching TikTok fashion shows that really influence me a lot.

The phrase 'TikTok fashion show' should be plural 'TikTok fashion shows' because it refers to multiple shows. Also, 'influenced' should be present tense 'influence' to match the present tense context of 'I like'.

× I really enjoy online shopping because there were variety of options that are available for me to choose.

✓ I really enjoy online shopping because there are a variety of options available for me to choose from.

The phrase 'there were variety of options' is incorrect. 'Variety' is a singular noun and requires the article 'a'. Also, since the enjoyment is in present tense, 'there are' is correct. Additionally, 'choose' should be followed by 'from' to complete the expression.

× Well I didn't really count that exact how much I spent on my shoes usually but I could tell you honestly I have.

✓ Well, I don't really count exactly how much I usually spend on my shoes, but I can tell you honestly I have.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. Since the question is about usual spending, present tense 'don't count' and 'usually spend' are appropriate. Also, 'exact' should be 'exactly' as an adverb modifying 'count'.

× I have spent all my money on my shoes last month since it was my birthday it was around £100.

✓ I spent all my money on shoes last month since it was my birthday; it was around £100.

The phrase 'I have spent' with a specific past time 'last month' is incorrect; simple past 'I spent' should be used. Also, 'on my shoes' is better as 'on shoes' for naturalness. The sentence is better split for clarity.

× I know it's can be quite crazy but that's how I go.

✓ I know it can be quite crazy, but that's how I go.

The phrase 'it's can be' is incorrect; 'it can be' is correct modal verb usage. The contraction 'it's' (it is) should not be used before 'can'.

× Me personally, I definitely prefer fashionable shoes instead of wearing comfortable shoes.

✓ Personally, I definitely prefer fashionable shoes instead of comfortable shoes.

The phrase 'Me personally' is incorrect; 'Personally' is sufficient and grammatically correct. Also, 'instead of wearing comfortable shoes' is better as 'instead of comfortable shoes' for parallel structure.

× Some people may judge me saying I'm crazy, but that's how I am 'cause I love fashion stuff, you know?

✓ Some people may judge me, saying I'm crazy, but that's how I am because I love fashion stuff, you know?

A comma is needed after 'judge me' to separate clauses. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in formal speech.

× I normally read fashion magazines twice a week so I get a lot good inspirations of how to style.

✓ I normally read fashion magazines twice a week, so I get a lot of good inspiration on how to style.

The phrase 'a lot good inspirations' is incorrect; it should be 'a lot of good inspiration'. 'Inspiration' is uncountable here. Also, 'of how to style' should be 'on how to style' for correct preposition use.