Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: သင်၏အဖြေသည် သဘာဝကျပြီး ထိရောက်မှုရှိရန် ပိုမိုတိကျစေရန် စကားလုံးများကို သေချာရွေးချယ်ပြီး စကားလုံးများကို ထပ်မံမပြောကြားရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ ဥပမာ၊ "I want to support myself" ဆိုသည်မှာ မသေချာသောကြောင့် "I want to support my father's education" ဟု ပြောင်းလဲရေးသားသင့်သည်။

예시: Yes, I really like buying shoes, but I usually save money to support my father's education. When I buy shoes, I look for high quality that meets my expectations. I usually buy shoes three or four times a year.

제안: အဖြေတွင် စကားလုံးများကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ အသုံးပြု၍ စကားလုံးအမှားများကို လျော့ပါးစေရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ ထို့အပြင် အကြောင်းအရာကို ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းစွာ ဖော်ပြရန် နှင့် ဆက်စပ်စကားလုံးများကို အသုံးပြု၍ စကားလုံးများကို ဆက်စပ်စေပါ။

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online. However, my sister-in-law ordered a pair for herself, but they didn't fit her, so she gave them to me. Honestly, I didn't like the quality and design, so I prefer buying shoes in traditional stores where I can check the quality myself.

제안: စကားလုံးများ၏ သဒ္ဒါမှားများကို ပြင်ဆင်ပြီး ပိုမိုသေချာသော စကားလုံးများနှင့် ပိုမိုတိကျသော အကြောင်းအရာများဖြင့် အဖြေကို တိုးချဲ့ပါ။ ဥပမာ၊ "jet" ဆိုသော စကားလုံးသည် မသေချာသောကြောင့် "Kyat" ဟု ပြောင်းလဲသုံးပါ။

예시: The amount of money I usually spend on shoes depends on the type. For simple shoes, I prefer to spend between 20,000 to 50,000 Kyat. But for special occasions, I look for shoes that cost at least 80,000 Kyat.

제안: အဖြေကို ပိုမိုသဘာဝကျပြီး စကားလုံးများကို သေချာရွေးချယ်၍ ပိုမိုတိကျစေရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ "balancedly" ဆိုသော စကားလုံးကို "a balance" သို့မဟုတ် "both" ဟု ပြောင်းလဲသုံးပါ။

예시: I prefer a balance between fashionable and comfortable shoes. For casual shoes, comfort is more important because we wear them every day. However, for special events like weddings or birthday parties, fashionable shoes are more important.

× I prefer saving my money for my father education because I want to support myself.

✓ I prefer saving my money for my father's education because I want to support myself.

The phrase 'my father education' is incorrect because it lacks the possessive form. In English, to show possession, we add an apostrophe and 's' to the noun. Therefore, it should be 'my father's education'. This clarifies that the education belongs to the father.

× Even if I buy a shoes, I look for the perfect, the perfect qualities which meet with my expectations.

✓ Even if I buy shoes, I look for the perfect qualities which meet my expectations.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Also, 'meet with' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'meet my expectations'. Therefore, 'a shoes' should be 'shoes' and 'meet with my expectations' should be 'meet my expectations'.

× I really buy it, uh, three or four times in a year.

✓ I usually buy them three or four times a year.

The sentence uses 'buy it' which is singular, but 'shoes' is plural, so 'them' is appropriate. Also, 'in a year' is better expressed as 'a year' without 'in'. The adverb 'usually' better expresses frequency in present tense.

× Actually she order for her but the site doesn't fit her and she gave it to me and honestly I don't like the quality and the design so I prefer uh looking for new only in traditional star.

✓ Actually, she ordered for her but the size didn't fit her and she gave it to me. Honestly, I don't like the quality and the design, so I prefer looking for new ones only in traditional stores.

The verb 'order' should be in past tense 'ordered' to match the past action. 'Site' is incorrect; the correct word is 'size' when referring to shoe fitting. 'Star' is likely a typo for 'store'. Also, 'looking for new only in traditional star' is awkward; it should be 'looking for new ones only in traditional stores'.

× The amounts of money I spends usually on shows.

✓ The amount of money I usually spend on shoes.

'Amounts' should be singular 'amount' because it refers to a quantity of money in general. 'Spends' should be 'spend' to agree with the singular subject 'I'. 'Shows' is a typo for 'shoes'.

× It depends on what I'm looking for.

✓ It depends on what I'm looking for.

This sentence is correct and requires no correction.

× If I'm looking for a simple one, I prefer 20 to 50,000 jet, but if the shoes is for a special occasion, uh, I look for at least 80,000.

✓ If I'm looking for a simple one, I prefer 20,000 to 50,000 jet, but if the shoes are for a special occasion, I look for at least 80,000.

The phrase 'the shoes is' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are'. Also, the number range should be '20,000 to 50,000' for clarity.

× I prefer balancedly on both fashionable and comfortable shoes.

✓ I prefer a balance between fashionable and comfortable shoes.

The adverb 'balancedly' is not commonly used in English. Instead, the phrase 'a balance between' is more natural and correct to express preference for both qualities.

× But for casual casual shoes I think comfortable is more important because we will wear it every day.

✓ But for casual shoes, I think comfort is more important because we wear them every day.

The word 'casual' is repeated unnecessarily. 'Comfortable' is an adjective; here, the noun 'comfort' is more appropriate. 'We will wear it' should be 'we wear them' to match plural 'shoes' and present tense.

× Umm but for special even like weddings or birthday party, it is more important to have fashionable.

✓ But for special events like weddings or birthday parties, it is more important to have fashionable shoes.

'Even' should be 'events'. 'Birthday party' should be plural 'birthday parties' to match 'weddings'. The pronoun 'it' is vague; specifying 'shoes' clarifies the sentence. Also, 'have fashionable' is incomplete; 'have fashionable shoes' is correct.