Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. For example, "feet will not get freeze" should be "feet will not freeze". Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly, such as "because" or "so that". Keep your sentences concise and avoid redundancy.

예시: I'm not very fond of buying new shoes and usually purchase them once or twice a year because I want to have appropriate footwear for different seasons. For example, I buy winter boots so that my feet don't freeze during the cold months.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward expressions, such as "on Internet" instead of "on the Internet" and "different price" instead of "different prices". To improve, use correct articles and plural forms, and include linking words like "because" or "so" to make your answer more coherent.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because some websites offer quite competitive prices, which is very tempting. I especially enjoy buying sneakers online because I can compare different prices for the same model easily.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains redundancy and some grammatical errors, such as using both "Because" and "so" together, which is unnecessary. Also, "last me long period" should be "last me a long time". Try to use linking words appropriately and avoid repeating the same idea.

예시: Since I don't buy shoes often, I tend to invest more when I do. I usually spend around €100 or more to buy good quality footwear so that they last me a long time.

제안: Your answer is understandable but somewhat repetitive and awkwardly phrased, for example, "because I need to work a lot due to my work" is redundant. Also, "keep my feet from all the pain or suffering" could be more naturally expressed. Try to use varied vocabulary and avoid repeating the same words unnecessarily.

예시: I always prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I spend a lot of time on my feet at work. Therefore, I choose shoes that prevent discomfort and pain throughout the day.

× For instance, I will buy winter boots so that my feet will not get freeze during cold.

✓ For instance, I will buy winter boots so that my feet will not get frozen during cold weather.

The verb 'freeze' should be in the past participle form 'frozen' to correctly form the passive voice in this context. 'Get frozen' indicates the state of the feet being affected by cold, which is the intended meaning here.

× Yes, I have bought shoes online multiple times because on Internet some websites usually offer quite competitive price which is quite tempting.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online multiple times because on the Internet some websites usually offer quite competitive prices which are quite tempting.

The phrase 'on Internet' should be 'on the Internet' because 'Internet' is a specific noun requiring the definite article 'the'. Also, 'price' should be plural 'prices' to agree with 'some websites' offering multiple prices, and 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with the plural subject.

× I especially enjoy buying sneakers on Internet because I can compare different price for the same model.

✓ I especially enjoy buying sneakers on the Internet because I can compare different prices for the same model.

Again, 'on Internet' should be 'on the Internet' due to the definite article requirement. 'Price' should be plural 'prices' because multiple prices are being compared, and 'for' is the correct preposition to indicate the object of comparison.

× Because I don't buy shoes frequently, so I tend to invest more every time when I need to purchase a new pair of shoes.

✓ Because I don't buy shoes frequently, I tend to invest more every time I need to purchase a new pair of shoes.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'Because' and 'so' together, which is redundant. Removing 'so' corrects the sentence structure. Also, 'every time when' is redundant; 'every time I need' is sufficient.

× I usually spend around €100 or even more to buy some footwear with good quality so that they can last me long period.

✓ I usually spend around €100 or even more to buy some footwear of good quality so that they can last me a long period.

The phrase 'with good quality' should be 'of good quality' to correctly describe the footwear. Also, 'long period' needs the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.