Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it concise.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I only buy them when I really need to. I prefer branded shoes like Nike and Adidas because they are long-lasting and look attractive.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentence structure. Be specific about your experience and avoid vague phrases.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. Online shopping offers a wide variety of options, which makes it easier to find the style and size I want.

제안: Provide a more direct answer with specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating previous answers.

예시: I usually spend quite a bit on shoes because I prefer branded ones. Therefore, I save money in advance to afford good quality shoes.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Be concise and avoid awkward expressions.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I spend long hours standing and walking at work. Comfortable shoes make it easier to move and protect my feet from pain.

× Guess I love buying shoes but I buying them whenever I need.

✓ Guess I love buying shoes but I buy them whenever I need.

The verb 'buying' is incorrectly used after 'I' without an auxiliary verb. The correct form is the base verb 'buy' to match the present simple tense in this context.

× Also I prefer to buy brander shoes because of their long lasting and attractive features such as Nike and Adidas is my favorite ones.

✓ Also I prefer to buy branded shoes because of their long-lasting and attractive features; brands such as Nike and Adidas are my favorites.

The word 'brander' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'branded'. 'Long lasting' should be hyphenated as 'long-lasting' when used as an adjective. 'Nike and Adidas is my favorite ones' has subject-verb agreement errors; 'brands such as Nike and Adidas are my favorites' is correct.

× Yes, multiple times I bought shoes on websites.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes multiple times on websites.

The present perfect tense 'have bought' is more appropriate here to indicate experience up to now. Also, the word order is improved for clarity.

× Also we have wide range of variety if we buy online.

✓ Also, we have a wide range of variety when we buy online.

The phrase 'wide range of variety' needs the article 'a'. 'If' is better replaced with 'when' to indicate the general condition of buying online.

× I prefer to buy branded shoes that are bit expensive.

✓ I prefer to buy branded shoes that are a bit expensive.

The phrase 'bit expensive' requires the article 'a' before 'bit' to be grammatically correct.

× I usually save money for them.

✓ I usually save money to buy them.

The preposition 'for' is less appropriate here; 'to buy them' clarifies the purpose of saving money.

× I choose comfortable ones because at my work I have to wear comfortable shoes for long harvest, standing position and walking purpose.

✓ I choose comfortable ones because at my work I have to wear comfortable shoes for long hours, standing, and walking.

The phrase 'long harvest' is incorrect; it should be 'long hours'. 'Standing position' and 'walking purpose' are awkward; simplified to 'standing' and 'walking'.

× Also it's very easy to walk and harmless for my feet.

✓ Also, they are very easy to walk in and harmless for my feet.

The sentence lacks a subject for 'easy to walk'; adding 'they are' clarifies meaning. 'Harmless for my feet' is acceptable but could be improved to 'harmless on my feet'.