Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and natural, but it is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because it makes me feel energetic. Usually, I buy shoes once or twice a month, but in urgent situations, I might buy a pair weekly.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and informal expressions. Try to use more formal and correct English, avoid filler words like 'you know', and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details linked logically.

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer trying them on in stores to ensure they fit well. Buying online can sometimes lead to regret if the shoes don't fit properly.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to make your response more coherent. Also, avoid starting sentences with fillers like 'Well'.

예시: The amount I spend on shoes depends on their type. For special or expensive shoes, I am willing to pay up to $50, but for regular comfortable shoes, I usually spend between $10 and $20.

제안: Your answer addresses the question well, but it can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, watch for minor grammatical errors and try to be more concise.

예시: I can't choose between fashionable and comfortable shoes because it depends on the occasion. For formal events, I prefer fashionable shoes like high heels, but for casual outings, I choose comfortable shoes.

× Yes, I love buying shoes, it gives me such a kind of energetic vibe and I'd like to buy and purchase more shoes once or twice a month.

✓ Yes, I love buying shoes; it gives me such an energetic vibe, and I'd like to buy and purchase more shoes once or twice a month.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'such a kind of energetic vibe'. The phrase 'such an energetic vibe' is more natural and grammatically correct. Also, the sentence is a run-on and should be separated properly with a semicolon or period to improve clarity.

× Actually, no, I've never bought shoes on online 'cause you know it will be much much better if you just go to the store and try it in the to see if you have any problem with the shoes, to see if it will fit your feet perfectly.

✓ Actually, no, I've never bought shoes online because you know it will be much better if you just go to the store and try them on to see if you have any problem with the shoes, to see if they will fit your feet perfectly.

The phrase 'bought shoes on online' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'online' without 'on'. Also, 'try it in the to see' is incorrect; it should be 'try them on to see'. 'Try on' is the correct phrasal verb for testing clothes or shoes.

× Actually, no, I've never bought shoes on online 'cause you know it will be much much better if you just go to the store and try it in the to see if you have any problem with the shoes, to see if it will fit your feet perfectly.

✓ Actually, no, I've never bought shoes online because you know it will be much better if you just go to the store and try them on to see if you have any problem with the shoes, to see if they will fit your feet perfectly.

The pronouns 'it' and 'it' are incorrectly used to refer to 'shoes', which is plural. The correct pronouns should be 'them' and 'they' to agree in number with 'shoes'.

× But if you buy it online, you might regret it later.

✓ But if you buy them online, you might regret it later.

The pronoun 'it' is used incorrectly to refer to 'shoes', which is plural. It should be 'them' to match the plural noun 'shoes'.

× Well it actually depends on the kind of shoes that I'm buying.

✓ Well, it actually depends on the kind of shoes that I'm buying.

A comma is needed after 'Well' to separate the introductory word from the rest of the sentence, improving readability.

× If it's a special and an expensive one, I wouldn't mind spending even $50 on it, but if it's just a normal comfy one I'll spend like 10 to $20.

✓ If it's a special and expensive one, I wouldn't mind spending even $50 on it, but if it's just a normal comfy one, I'll spend like $10 to $20.

The article 'an' before 'expensive' is unnecessary when 'special' and 'expensive' are used together. Also, a comma is needed before 'I'll' to separate the clauses. The dollar sign should be consistent before both amounts.

× Well, I cannot choose one of them only because it actually depends on the place that I'm going to.

✓ Well, I cannot choose just one of them because it actually depends on the place that I'm going to.

The phrase 'choose one of them only' is awkward; 'choose just one of them' is more natural. Also, 'only' is better placed before 'one' to clarify the meaning.

× Because if I'm going to an event like a formal place, I would prefer a fashionable shoes like high heels.

✓ Because if I'm going to an event like a formal place, I would prefer fashionable shoes like high heels.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'shoes'. It should be removed to match the plural form.

× But if I'm going to somewhere normal like shopping or hanging out with my friends or visiting an old friend, I would prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ But if I'm going somewhere normal like shopping or hanging out with my friends or visiting an old friend, I would prefer comfortable shoes.

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary before 'somewhere'. The correct phrase is 'going somewhere' without 'to'.