Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且内容重复且不够具体。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并用更自然的表达方式描述感受。

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because it makes me feel happy and confident. Whenever I wear new shoes, I feel stylish and more fashionable.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，且缺少连贯的逻辑。建议使用正确的时态和句型，清楚表达网上购物的便利性，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is convenient. I can shop using my phone without going outside, and the shoes are delivered directly to my home.

제안: 回答中语法和表达不准确，且内容不够具体。建议明确说明花费金额范围，并解释为什么选择高质量鞋子，使用连贯的句子。

예시: I usually spend a considerable amount on shoes because I think they are important for going outside. I prefer high-quality shoes that are comfortable and durable.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，表达不够流畅。建议使用正确的词汇和句型，清晰表达偏好并给出具体原因。

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I am a student and walk a lot at school. Comfortable shoes support my feet and help me walk longer without pain.

× You love buying shoes because one night buying new shoes, I feel that my, uh, emotion is changing.

✓ I love buying shoes because one night when buying new shoes, I feel that my emotion is changing.

句子主语与谓语不一致，应该用“I love”而不是“You love”。此外，'one night buying new shoes'缺少连接词，应加上'when'使句子通顺。

× And when I was wearing some new shoes on my feet, I think that I was, uh, stylish and fashionable.

✓ And when I wore some new shoes on my feet, I thought that I was stylish and fashionable.

描述过去的动作时，动词时态应保持一致，'was wearing'改为简单过去时'wore'更合适，'think'应改为过去时'thought'。

× Oh, I like to buying shoes online because it's more conversation and I don't need to going outside and it's just using phone to buy in and it can uh, post me to my home.

✓ Oh, I like buying shoes online because it's more convenient and I don't need to go outside; I just use my phone to buy, and it can deliver to my home.

'like to buying'应改为'like buying'，'don't need to going'应改为'don't need to go'，'using phone to buy in'表达不清，应改为'I just use my phone to buy'，'post me to my home'应改为'deliver to my home'。

× Oh, I like to buying shoes online because it's more conversation and I don't need to going outside and it's just using phone to buy in and it can uh, post me to my home.

✓ Oh, I like buying shoes online because it's more convenient and I don't need to go outside; I just use my phone to buy, and it can deliver to my home.

'more conversation'用词错误，应为'more convenient'表示更方便。

× Uh, I will spend a lot on shoes for me because I believe that it's is, uh, important things that I gone outside.

✓ Uh, I spend a lot on shoes because I believe that it's an important thing when I go outside.

'will spend'改为一般现在时'spend'更符合习惯表达，'it's is'重复，应为'it's'，'important things'应为单数'an important thing'，'I gone outside'时态错误，应为'I go outside'。

× So I prefer to spend a lot on the high quality shoes that can make me, uh, comfortable.

✓ So I prefer to spend a lot on high-quality shoes that can make me comfortable.

'the high quality shoes'中'the'不必要，且'high quality'应连字符连接为'high-quality'。

× All I would say I prefer to choose the comfort bully shoes because I'm a student and umm I go a lot, walk a lot in this school and uh comfortably shoe shoes can support me to go a lot and make my feet well.

✓ I would say I prefer to choose comfortable shoes because I'm a student and I walk a lot in this school, and comfortable shoes can support me to walk a lot and keep my feet well.

'comfort bully shoes'应为'comfortable shoes'，'comfortably shoe shoes'重复且错误，应为'comfortable shoes'，'go a lot'表达不准确，应为'walk a lot'。