Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical errors that affect clarity, such as "olive bushes done" and "I'll refer investing." To improve, focus on clear and correct sentence structures, avoid redundancy, and keep your answer concise and relevant to the question. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, and I usually buy them a few times a year, especially during sales because it helps me save money. I prefer investing in high-quality, durable shoes that last longer rather than buying many cheap pairs.

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are minor grammatical errors such as "customers reviews" instead of "customer reviews" and "make a informed decisions" instead of "make informed decisions." To improve, pay attention to article usage and plural forms, and try to use linking words like "and" or "which" to connect ideas more smoothly.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times. I find it convenient because I can browse a variety of styles and brands. Recently, I bought a new pair of sneakers online that fit perfectly, and I also enjoy reading customer reviews to help me make informed decisions.

제안: Your answer contains several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases, such as "I should spend a moderate amount of on shoes" and "I valuable comfort." To improve, focus on correct sentence structure, avoid redundancy, and provide clear supporting details with proper linking words.

예시: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I value comfort and durability. I try not to spend too much since I have other priorities, like saving for clothes or gadgets, instead of buying new shoes frequently.

제안: Your answer is relevant and structured, but there are some awkward phrases like "walk outstand for long builders" and "for more occasions." To improve, use clearer and more natural expressions, and include linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: My preference depends on the situation. For everyday activities, I usually choose comfortable shoes because they allow me to walk long distances without discomfort. However, for special events or formal occasions, I prefer fashionable shoes to look stylish and feel confident.

× I usually buy olive bushes done when I need a new bag.

✓ I usually buy olive bushes when I need a new bag.

The word 'done' is incorrectly used here as an adjective or adverb. It is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence meaning. Removing 'done' corrects the sentence.

× I'll refer investing in high quality durable shoes that can last a long time rather than buy buying many cheaper bags.

✓ I'll prefer investing in high quality durable shoes that can last a long time rather than buying many cheaper bags.

The phrase 'refer investing' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'prefer'. Also, 'buy buying' is redundant; 'buying' alone is correct. This correction fixes verb choice and redundancy.

× Recently I bought a new pair of sneakers online and they fit perfectly and I also enjoy reading customers reviews to help me make a informed decisions.

✓ Recently I bought a new pair of sneakers online and they fit perfectly and I also enjoy reading customers' reviews to help me make informed decisions.

The possessive form 'customers'' is needed to show ownership of reviews. Also, 'a informed decisions' is incorrect; 'informed decisions' without 'a' is correct because 'decisions' is plural.

× I should spend a moderate amount of on shoes because I valuable comfort and durability.

✓ I should spend a moderate amount on shoes because I value comfort and durability.

The phrase 'amount of on shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'amount on shoes'. Also, 'valuable' is an adjective, but the verb 'value' is needed here to express the action.

× I often save money for clothes or and or gadgets because I instead of buying a new shoes frequently.

✓ I often save money for clothes and gadgets instead of buying new shoes frequently.

The phrase 'or and or' is incorrect and redundant; 'and' is appropriate here. Also, 'a new shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; 'new shoes' is correct. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I usually choose comfortable shoes because they allow me to walk outstand for long builders without any discomfort.

✓ I usually choose comfortable shoes because they allow me to walk outstandingly for long periods without any discomfort.

The word 'outstand' is incorrect; the adverb 'outstandingly' fits better. 'Builders' is incorrect in this context; 'periods' or 'hours' is appropriate to indicate duration. This correction fixes plural and word choice errors.