Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Also, clarify the last sentence about Sydney's weather for better coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't buy many shoes, but I like to have the right pair for each season. In China, I bought shoes about four times a year because of the distinct seasons. However, in Sydney, I only buy shoes twice a year since the weather is milder and less varied.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing phrases like 'I am quite puppet and my feet are smooth too.' Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid irrelevant or unclear comments. Also, use linking words to explain your preference logically.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but very rarely. I prefer to try shoes on in a physical store to ensure they fit well. However, if the store doesn't have my size or preferred style, I will buy shoes online.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and completeness. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: The amount I spend on shoes really depends on the type. I love boots, which tend to be more expensive than other shoes. Generally, I spend about $100 on each pair. Most of the shoes I buy are for junior kids, so the price varies accordingly.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more structured and natural. Avoid repeating 'it really depends' and use linking words to organise your ideas clearly. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with examples.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes when exercising because they support my feet. However, for everyday wear, I try to balance fashion and comfort depending on the occasion.

× Here in Sydney though, I buy shoes about twice a year because the weather mostly feels like.

✓ Here in Sydney though, I buy shoes about twice a year because the weather mostly feels the same.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'feels like' which is incomplete and unclear. It needs an object or complement to complete the meaning. Adding 'the same' clarifies the comparison and completes the sentence logically.

× Yes, but very rarely you can see that I am quite puppet and my feet are smooth too.

✓ Yes, but very rarely do you see that I am quite picky and my feet are smooth too.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and uses 'puppet' incorrectly. The phrase 'very rarely you can see' should be inverted to 'very rarely do you see' for correct emphasis. Also, 'puppet' is not appropriate here; likely the intended word is 'picky' meaning selective.

× Where it really depends.

✓ Well, it really depends.

The sentence 'Where it really depends.' is incomplete and incorrect. 'Where' is not appropriate here; 'Well' is the correct discourse marker to express hesitation or consideration.

× but in general I spent about $100 on each pair most of the time.

✓ but in general I spend about $100 on each pair most of the time.

The sentence refers to a habitual action, so the present tense 'spend' should be used instead of the past tense 'spent'.

× The shoes I buy are usually for junior kids. They tend.

✓ The shoes I buy are usually for junior kids. They tend to be more affordable.

The sentence 'They tend.' is incomplete and unclear. It needs a complement to complete the thought. Adding 'to be more affordable' clarifies the meaning.