Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более связным и логичным. Избегайте повторений и неполных предложений. Используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, especially sneakers, because I wear them more often than other types. I usually buy sneakers for winter as they keep my feet warm and comfortable.

제안: Ответ содержит много повторений и нечетких выражений. Следует говорить более ясно и структурировано, избегая лишних слов.

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to check the material and quality in person before purchasing.

제안: Ответ должен быть более связным и содержать полные предложения. Избегайте повторений и используйте связующие слова для логичности.

예시: I usually spend around 12 thousand because I believe quality shoes are important since I wear them every day.

제안: Ответ содержит много пауз и повторений. Следует говорить более уверенно и использовать связующие слова для плавности речи.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because comfort is very important to me. When shoes are comfortable, I can wear them all day without any problems.

× I wear more sneakers than than boost.

✓ I wear more sneakers than boots.

The word 'boost' is incorrect here; the correct plural form is 'boots' to match the comparison with 'sneakers'. This is a singular and plural issue because 'boost' is singular and incorrect in this context.

× Also I wear SH.

✓ Also, I wear shoes.

The abbreviation 'SH' is unclear and does not form a proper sentence. It should be replaced with the full word 'shoes' to make the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× I wear sneakers in winter because it's.

✓ I wear sneakers in winter because they are comfortable.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear predicate. Adding a reason completes the sentence and improves clarity.

× Honestly I never bought a shoes online because when I buy something I I should check the the IT should the it's materials it is is it's is it in the I I try to check. Shoes quality.

✓ Honestly, I have never bought shoes online because when I buy something, I should check the materials. I try to check the quality of shoes.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, the sentence is fragmented and repetitive; restructuring improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Honestly, I spent. 12 thousands uh, because for me, it's important, uh, quality shoes, the quality, the quality of shoes is because you, you wear it because you wear it every day.

✓ Honestly, I spend 12 thousand because, for me, quality shoes are important since you wear them every day.

The verb 'spent' is past tense, but the question asks about usual spending, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate. Also, '12 thousands' is incorrect; '12 thousand' is the correct quantifier. Pronouns and sentence structure are corrected for clarity.

× Honestly, I spent. 12 thousands uh, because for me, it's important, uh, quality shoes, the quality, the quality of shoes is because you, you wear it because you wear it every day.

✓ Honestly, I spend 12 thousand because, for me, quality shoes are important since you wear them every day.

The pronoun 'it' is used incorrectly to refer to 'shoes', which is plural; 'them' is the correct pronoun for plural nouns.

× Uh, for me, uh, really important, uh, comfort, comfort. Therefore I prefer uh, therefore I usually prefer comfortable shoes, uh, because, uh, because when you wear it, you can't afford any problems like, uh, it's.

✓ For me, comfort is really important. Therefore, I usually prefer comfortable shoes because when you wear them, you don't have any problems.

The sentence has redundant conjunctions and fillers like 'uh' and repeated words. Removing unnecessary conjunctions and fillers improves sentence flow and clarity. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'shoes'.