Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and making it more natural. Instead of saying 'for example' and then giving a specific instance, you can directly state when you buy shoes. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I love buying shoes, especially on special occasions such as weddings or birthday parties.

제안: Your answer has good content but the sentence structure and word choice can be improved for clarity and naturalness. Avoid phrases like 'I believe buying it online because it catches my eyes' which is unclear. Use linking words to connect reasons logically and be specific about your experience.

예시: Yes, I have bought many shoes online because the stores I like are not available in my hometown. Moreover, online shopping allows me to find attractive designs at reasonable prices.

제안: Your answer is a bit repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect ideas. Also, be careful with grammar, for example, '2 pair' should be '2 pairs'. Try to make your answer more natural and clear.

예시: I usually don't spend much on shoes because I prefer buying them during sales, so I can get the same quality at discounted prices and sometimes even buy two pairs for the price of one.

제안: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive with the word 'comfort'. Try to vary your vocabulary and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes since I can wear them with any outfit at any time. Comfort is my top priority, so I always choose shoes that feel good to wear.

× I usually buy shoes in special occasions like wedding or birthday party.

✓ I usually buy shoes on special occasions like weddings or birthday parties.

The correct preposition to use with 'special occasions' is 'on'. Also, 'wedding' and 'birthday party' should be pluralized to 'weddings' and 'birthday parties' to refer to such events in general.

× So I believe buying it online because it catches my eyes and I got them in a really reasonable price.

✓ So I believe in buying them online because they catch my eye and I got them at a really reasonable price.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to multiple shoes; 'them' should be used. 'Catches my eyes' should be 'catch my eye' as 'eye' is singular in this idiom. Also, the preposition 'in' before 'a really reasonable price' should be 'at'.

× I don't spend much money while buying shoes because I prefer buying shoes on sales because we can get the same shoes at discounted price and it would be very helpful to buy 2 pair of shoes at 1 price.

✓ I don't spend much money while buying shoes because I prefer buying shoes on sale since we can get the same shoes at a discounted price and it would be very helpful to buy 2 pairs of shoes at 1 price.

The phrase 'on sales' should be 'on sale' as 'sale' is uncountable here. 'At discounted price' needs the article 'a' before 'discounted price'. '2 pair' should be '2 pairs' to agree in number.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because I can wear it whenever I want with every outfit and comfort is the priority for me and I always go for my comfort.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I can wear them whenever I want with every outfit and comfort is the priority for me and I always go for my comfort.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural 'shoes'; 'them' should be used to maintain agreement in number.