Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时语法时态不一致，且有口语填充词“umm”，建议注意时态一致性，避免使用口语填充词，并且回答可以更简洁自然。

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I only buy them once or twice each season. When I was younger, I preferred high heels because they made me feel elegant and stylish. However, now I prefer comfortable shoes since they are more practical for daily use.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，且表达不够连贯，建议注意语法准确性，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is very convenient. You can easily browse different styles at home and place an order immediately. Moreover, returning shoes is simple and hassle-free, which makes online shopping even better.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和口语填充词，表达不够清晰，建议注意语法结构，避免口语填充词，并且表达更具体明确。

예시: It usually depends on the type of shoes I buy, but normally I spend less than 1000. I prefer comfortable and durable shoes, so I don't mind spending a bit more if the quality is good. However, I try to avoid spending money on trendy shoes.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达重复，建议注意句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用连接词使回答更连贯。

예시: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because they are better for my feet, especially since I have to walk a lot. However, when I was younger, I preferred fashionable shoes because they made me feel stylish. As I have grown older, I have gradually realized that comfort is more important.

× When I was younger I prefer high heels because they would make me feel more elegant and stylish.

✓ When I was younger I preferred high heels because they would make me feel more elegant and stylish.

这里描述的是过去的习惯动作，应该使用过去时态，动词prefer需改为过去式preferred。

× Nowadays I only buy new shoes I think once or twice each season.

✓ Nowadays I only buy new shoes, I think, once or twice each season.

句子中缺少逗号来分隔插入语，使句子结构更清晰。

× they umm, they're more practical for daily use.

✓ they're more practical for daily use.

“umm”是口语填充词，书面表达中应去除以保持正式和简洁。

× You can easily browse different styles at home and make an order right away when when it's not fit.

✓ You can easily browse different styles at home and make an order right away when it doesn't fit.

“when it's not fit”中“fit”用法不当，应改为“doesn't fit”，符合英语习惯表达。

× Returning them are quite simple and hassle free which makes online shopping even better.

✓ Returning them is quite simple and hassle free which makes online shopping even better.

主语“Returning them”是单数，谓语动词应使用单数形式“is”。

× Umm it usually depends on what type of shoes am I buying, but norm normally I will spend less than 1000 for example.

✓ Umm it usually depends on what type of shoes I am buying, but normally I will spend less than 1000, for example.

疑问句结构“am I buying”在陈述句中应改为“I am buying”，且“norm normally”重复，应删去“norm”。

× I don't mind to find a little much more money if the quality is good, but I would try to avoid spending my money on trend.

✓ I don't mind spending a little more money if the quality is good, but I would try to avoid spending my money on trends.

“mind”后应接动名词“spending”，而非不定式“to find”；“a little much more”表达不自然，应改为“a little more”；“on trend”应为复数“on trends”。

× But when I however when I was younger I prefer fashionable shoes because wearing them makes me feel comfortable and stylish.

✓ But when I was younger I preferred fashionable shoes because wearing them made me feel comfortable and stylish.

描述过去的习惯动作，动词prefer和makes应改为过去式preferred和made。

× As likely you have grown older, I gradually realized that comfort is more important.

✓ As I have grown older, I gradually realized that comfort is more important.

“As likely you have grown older”结构不正确，应改为“As I have grown older”。