Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some language inaccuracies and awkward phrases, such as "painting too much money" which should be "spending too much money." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly and avoid redundancy. For example, you can say "I really enjoy buying shoes because... However, I don't buy them very often because..."

예시: I really enjoy buying shoes because there is a wide variety to choose from, which lets me express my creativity and personal style. However, I don't buy them very often because I think it's not worth spending too much money on shoes. Therefore, I usually buy shoes only when I need them.

제안: Your answer is well-structured and provides specific details with examples, which is good. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence. For example, use "Moreover" or "In addition" to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. For example, when I was in high school, I needed a pair of shoes for my graduation dress, so I ordered them from a well-known Chinese app. Moreover, buying online offered a wider variety of styles that I couldn't find in local stores, and it was very convenient to find a pair that fit me well.

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes examples, but it could be improved by using clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary. For instance, instead of "the amount of money depends on the quality and the occasion," you could say "the amount I spend varies depending on the quality and the occasion." Also, avoid repeating "for" in "last for me at least for four years."

예시: Well, the amount I spend varies depending on the quality and the occasion. For example, when I need to replace my worn-out shoes, I prefer to invest in a pair that will last me at least four years. Therefore, I don't focus too much on the price.

제안: Your answer is clear and well-organized with good examples. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more natural and fluent. For example, use "Although" to contrast ideas and "For example" to introduce examples.

예시: Although comfort is important, I prefer fashionable shoes because visual appeal matters a lot to me. Even if a pair is extremely comfortable, I usually avoid wearing them if I don't like their design or style. For example, I always try to choose shoes that match my outfits.

× I think that it's not worth painting too much money on them.

✓ I think that it's not worth spending too much money on them.

The modal verb phrase 'worth' should be followed by a gerund (verb + -ing form). 'Painting' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'spending' to express the idea of using money.

× I ordered them from a well known Chinese app.

✓ I ordered them from a well-known Chinese app.

The phrase 'well known' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before a noun to correctly modify 'Chinese app'.