Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“love buying shoes oftenly”应为“love buying shoes often”，“who have me work more comfortable”应为“that make me work more comfortably”。建议注意动词形式和定语从句的正确使用，使表达更自然流畅。

예시: I don't often buy shoes because I see them as practical items that help me work more comfortably. Usually, I buy a new pair once a year when my old ones are worn out.

제안: 回答中存在主谓不一致问题，如“shopping online are”应为“shopping online is”，以及表达重复和不够简洁。建议使用连词连接句子，使表达更连贯，同时注意主谓一致。

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because shopping online is very convenient. In addition, the prices are usually cheaper, and I can find a wider variety of styles to choose from.

제안: 回答中表达有些重复且不够简洁，如“prefer not to spend too much money rather than the fashion”表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用更准确的词汇。

예시: I usually spend about 200 to 400 yuan on a pair of shoes because I consider them practical items and don't want to spend too much money on fashion.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰，如“that's depends”应为“that depends”，“make my whole health feel more beautiful”表达不自然，“The fandom shoes are much better”含义不明。建议使用更准确的表达，避免模糊和错误。

예시: It depends. When I hang out with friends, I prefer fashionable shoes to look good. However, in daily life, I choose comfortable shoes because I need to work a lot and comfort is more important.

× Well, I'm not the kind of person who love buying shoes oftenly because for me shoes are practical items who have me work more comfortable.

✓ Well, I'm not the kind of person who loves buying shoes often because, for me, shoes are practical items that make me work more comfortably.

这里的主语是单数的"person"，所以谓语动词应该用第三人称单数形式"loves"。"oftenly"不是正确的副词形式，应该用"often"。"who have me work more comfortable"结构不正确，应该用"that make me work more comfortably"，其中"comfortably"是副词，修饰动词"work"。

× Well, I'm not the kind of person who love buying shoes oftenly because for me shoes are practical items who have me work more comfortable.

✓ Well, I'm not the kind of person who loves buying shoes often because, for me, shoes are practical items that make me work more comfortably.

"who love"中的"love"应改为第三人称单数形式"loves"，因为先行词是单数"person"。

× Well, I'm not the kind of person who love buying shoes oftenly because for me shoes are practical items who have me work more comfortable.

✓ Well, I'm not the kind of person who loves buying shoes often because, for me, shoes are practical items that make me work more comfortably.

"who"用于指代物品时不合适，应该用"that"来指代"items"。

× So I usually buy a new pair once a year when when my old ones are worn out.

✓ So I usually buy a new pair once a year when my old ones are worn out.

句中"when when"重复，应删除一个。"are worn out"使用现在时态表示习惯动作，符合语境，无需改动。

× Yeah, I have bought shoes online quite often because now shopping online are very convenient, Umm and in addition to that, the price online are much cheaper and I can search more kind of shoes, more styles to choose.

✓ Yeah, I have bought shoes online quite often because now shopping online is very convenient, and in addition to that, the prices online are much cheaper and I can search more kinds of shoes, more styles to choose from.

"shopping online"是单数，谓语动词应为"is"而非"are"。"price"应为复数"prices"，因为指多种商品的价格。"more kind of shoes"应为"more kinds of shoes"，表示多种类。

× Yeah, I have bought shoes online quite often because now shopping online are very convenient, Umm and in addition to that, the price online are much cheaper and I can search more kind of shoes, more styles to choose.

✓ Yeah, I have bought shoes online quite often because now shopping online is very convenient, and in addition to that, the prices online are much cheaper and I can search more kinds of shoes, more styles to choose from.

"more styles to choose"缺少介词"from"，正确表达应为"more styles to choose from"。

× Well, from my point of view, I usually spend about 200 to CN¥400 on a pair of shoes because I think shoes are just practical items and I don't want to waste too much money on that.

✓ Well, from my point of view, I usually spend about CN¥200 to CN¥400 on a pair of shoes because I think shoes are just practical items and I don't want to waste too much money on that.

货币数额表达中，单位应放在数字前面，且范围表达应统一格式，如"CN¥200 to CN¥400"。

× So I prefer not to spend too much money rather than the fashion.

✓ So I prefer not to spend too much money on fashion.

"rather than"用法不当，句意应表达不愿在时尚上花太多钱，正确表达为"prefer not to spend too much money on fashion"。

× Well, that's depends.

✓ Well, that depends.

"that"是第三人称单数，谓语动词应为"depends"，而不是"that's depends"。

× Umm, just like when I want to hang out with my friends, I usually choose the fashionable shoes to make my whole health feel more beautiful.

✓ Umm, just like when I want to hang out with my friends, I usually choose fashionable shoes to make myself feel more beautiful overall.

"the fashionable shoes"中冠词不必要，且"my whole health feel more beautiful"表达不自然，应改为"make myself feel more beautiful overall"。

× Umm but in my daily life, I usually choose the comfortable shoes because I usually need to work a lot.

✓ Umm, but in my daily life, I usually choose comfortable shoes because I usually need to work a lot.

"the comfortable shoes"中冠词不必要，且句中逗号使用更自然。

× The fandom shoes are much better.

✓ The comfortable shoes are much better.

"fandom shoes"表达不清，推测为"comfortable shoes"，应改正。