Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然，如“shows”应为“shoes”，且句子结构不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: I used to buy shoes frequently when I was in junior high school because my friends liked to show off their new shoes. However, now I prefer to buy comfortable shoes that I can wear for a long time.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如“a variety a wide variety”和“I will I will”。建议注意句子简洁，避免重复，并正确使用时态。

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because it is very convenient. I can choose from a wide variety of styles without leaving my home. Although there is sometimes a risk of counterfeit products, I always check the reviews before making a purchase.

제안: 回答中“shows”应为“shoes”，且表达不够清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免模糊表达，并且句子结构更自然。

예시: I used to spend a lot of money on shoes, sometimes over 100 Chinese yuan, mainly due to peer pressure and wanting to keep up with my friends. But now, I prioritize comfort and usually spend less than 300 yuan on a pair of shoes.

제안: 回答中有语法错误，如“that are that looks”，且句子稍显冗长。建议简化句子，注意主谓一致，使表达更流畅。

예시: To be honest, I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because I believe it's possible to have both. For example, I sometimes buy expensive branded shoes that look beautiful and are comfortable to wear all day.

× However, nowadays I just prefer to buy comfortable shoes that I can so that I can wear for a long time.

✓ However, nowadays I just prefer to buy comfortable shoes that I can wear for a long time.

句子中出现了多余的“so that I can”，导致结构不完整且语义重复，应删除“so that I can”使句子通顺。

× I can choose from a variety a wide variety of styles without leaving my home.

✓ I can choose from a wide variety of styles without leaving my home.

“a variety a wide variety”重复使用了量词，造成冗余，应删除其中一个，保持表达简洁。

× Although there is sometimes a risk of counterfeit products, I will I will check the reviews before I making a purchase.

✓ Although there is sometimes a risk of counterfeit products, I will check the reviews before making a purchase.

“I will I will”重复，且“before I making”中“making”应为动名词形式，且不需要主语“I”，应改为“before making”。

× I used to spend a lot of money on shows, sometimes over 100 Chinese yuan, mainly because of the press, peer pressure and wanting to keep up with my friends.

✓ I used to spend a lot of money on shoes, sometimes over 100 Chinese yuan, mainly because of the press, peer pressure and wanting to keep up with my friends.

“shows”应为“shoes”，前者意为“表演”，后者意为“鞋子”，语义错误。

× For example, sometimes I buy a pair of expensive branded shoes that are that looks very beautiful and are also very comfortable to wear all day.

✓ For example, sometimes I buy a pair of expensive branded shoes that look very beautiful and are also very comfortable to wear all day.

“that are that looks”中“that”重复且动词形式错误，应改为“that look”，因为主语是复数“shoes”。