Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid irrelevant or confusing details, and use linking words to organise your ideas logically. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant to the question about buying shoes and frequency.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually purchase them a few times a year. For instance, I often buy new shoes when I see a good deal or a style I like. However, I don't buy shoes very frequently, maybe two or three times annually.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains hesitations. Try to speak more confidently and clearly, directly answering the question. Use linking words to explain reasons and avoid repetition. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage will improve your response.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online recently because I wanted a specific type that isn't available in local stores. However, I don't shop online very often since I prefer trying shoes on before buying.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but could be improved by using more precise linking words and correcting minor grammar errors. Also, try to avoid repetition and make your sentences more concise and natural.

예시: I usually spend between $50 and $100 per year on shoes. I prefer investing in good quality brands like Nike or Adidas because their shoes are comfortable and durable, which saves me money in the long term.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically. Also, avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences to make your answer more natural.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because comfort is very important, especially when I have to stand or work for long hours. For example, even if a pair of shoes looks stylish, I won't choose them if they cause pain or discomfort.

× I like to buy cigars in different locations, like in wedding different suits for spending time with five.

✓ I like to buy shoes in different styles for spending time at weddings with friends.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'cigars' instead of 'shoes' and 'wedding different suits' which is unclear. The quantifier and noun usage is incorrect and confusing. The correction clarifies the intended meaning by using appropriate quantifiers and nouns relevant to the context.

× I bought a comedy shoes.

✓ I bought some comedy shoes.

The adjective 'comedy' is incorrectly used to describe 'shoes'. It seems the student meant 'comfy' or 'comfortable' shoes. Also, 'shoes' is plural, so 'a' is incorrect. The correction uses 'some' to match plural noun and assumes 'comedy' was a mispronunciation or error for 'comfy'.

× I need to buy from online, but I don't use that much online shopping and I don't I have not insisted in online shopping.

✓ I need to buy online, but I don't use online shopping much and I have not insisted on online shopping.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used with 'online'. Also, 'insisted in' should be 'insisted on'. The correction fixes preposition usage to standard English.

× Usually I spend 50 to $100 per year.

✓ Usually I spend $50 to $100 per year.

The quantifier and currency symbol placement is incorrect. The dollar sign should precede the amount consistently. The correction places the dollar sign before both amounts.

× I often choose brands known for their long lasting materials like Nike, Adidas which save money saves me money in the long run.

✓ I often choose brands known for their long-lasting materials like Nike and Adidas, which save me money in the long run.

The phrase 'save money saves me money' is redundant and incorrect. Also, 'long lasting' should be hyphenated as 'long-lasting'. The correction fixes plural agreement and removes redundancy.

× I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort is essential for delivery, especially when I have to work or stand for long periods.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort is essential, especially when I have to work or stand for long periods.

The word 'delivery' is incorrectly used here and seems out of context. Removing it clarifies the sentence meaning.

× For example, even I if I fear of shoes looks stylish, I will not choose them if they cause pain or discomfort or limited the I believe that.

✓ For example, even if I feel shoes look stylish, I will not choose them if they cause pain or discomfort. I believe that.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'fear of shoes looks stylish' is incorrect; it should be 'feel shoes look stylish'. The phrase 'or limited the I believe that' is unclear and likely a fragment. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.