Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and phrases such as 'you know' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'various types of shoes' instead of 'different kind of shoes') and correct the word 'chainers' to 'trainers'. Keep your answer concise and directly relevant to the question.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes and I usually purchase them every month. This is because shoes often go on sale, and I need various types such as high heels, boots, or trainers for different occasions.

제안: Avoid repeating similar ideas and filler phrases like 'basically' and 'because'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, replace 'from the Internet' with 'online' for natural phrasing. Try to be more concise and precise.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is convenient and allows me to compare prices easily. Therefore, online shopping is my preferred method.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'well' and 'uh' and redundant phrases such as 'it depends on the shoes 'cause it varies'. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'however' to make your answer coherent. Also, specify the currency when mentioning prices and correct grammar mistakes (e.g., 'it costs me less than 100').

예시: The amount I spend on shoes varies depending on the style and brand. For example, the shoes I am wearing now are quite expensive because they are from a famous brand. However, I sometimes spend less than £100 when buying slippers or flip flops.

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Avoid repeating ideas and use linking words like 'although' or 'however' to connect contrasting points. Also, correct phrases such as 'comforts always comes first' to 'comfort always comes first' and 'you will feel hurts' to 'they will hurt'. Keep your answer concise and coherent.

예시: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because comfort always comes first. Although fashionable shoes may look good for photos or matching outfits, they often do not fit well and can be painful, so I rarely wear them and usually avoid buying them.

× girls always need different kind of shoes like high heels, boots or chainers for different purposes.

✓ girls always need different kinds of shoes like high heels, boots or chainers for different purposes.

The phrase 'different kind of shoes' is incorrect because 'kind' should be pluralized to 'kinds' when referring to multiple types. The correct phrase is 'different kinds of shoes' to indicate various categories or types of shoes.

× Whereas sometimes it cost me less than 100 if I'm just going to buy slippers or flip flops.

✓ Whereas sometimes it costs me less than 100 if I'm just going to buy slippers or flip flops.

The verb 'cost' should be in the third person singular present tense 'costs' to agree with the singular subject 'it' in the present tense context. Using 'cost' without 's' is incorrect here.

× Comforts always comes first and if you just wear a fashionable shoes and that doesn't fit you will feel hurts.

✓ Comfort always comes first and if you just wear fashionable shoes and they don't fit you will feel hurt.

'Comforts' should be singular 'comfort' because it is an uncountable noun here. 'Shoes' is plural, so 'a fashionable shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'fashionable shoes' without 'a'. Also, 'that doesn't fit' should be 'they don't fit' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'. Finally, 'feel hurts' is incorrect; the correct form is 'feel hurt' as 'hurt' is an adjective here.

× And even though it's good for taking pictures or to match your outfit but you don't wear them very frequently.

✓ Even though it's good for taking pictures or to match your outfit, you don't wear them very frequently.

Using both 'and' and 'but' together to connect clauses is redundant and incorrect. The sentence should start with 'Even though' and then continue without 'but' to maintain proper conjunction usage.