Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to be more concise and organise your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid repetition, for example, avoid repeating 'comfortable' multiple times. Also, correct grammar mistakes like 'the same by same size' to 'the same size'.

예시: Yes, I love buying shoes, especially from different brands and styles. I usually prefer comfortable yet elegant shoes of the same size. I buy new shoes every one or two months.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your reasons. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'buy shoes for more'.

예시: Yes, I mostly buy shoes online from Myntra and Amazon because I can compare prices easily. Moreover, I know my shoe size well, so buying online is convenient for me.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and be specific with amounts. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: The amount I spend on shoes depends on the type. For example, I usually spend around ₹5000 on sneakers, but for running or casual shoes, I spend between ₹2000 to ₹3000 depending on the brand.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain your reason using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like 'I'm bond in my comfort zone' and 'comfortable is my first period'.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because being comfortable is more important than fashion for me. When I feel comfortable, I can focus better and do my activities without any problems.

× I love to collect shoes specially from different brands and different style.

✓ I love to collect shoes especially from different brands and different styles.

The word 'specially' is incorrectly used; the correct adverb here is 'especially' to indicate preference. Also, 'style' should be plural 'styles' to match 'different'.

× I usually buy my shoes with two, one or two months.

✓ I usually buy my shoes every one or two months.

The phrase 'with two, one or two months' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'every one or two months' to indicate frequency.

× I mostly buy my shoes from online, specially from Myntra and Amazon,

✓ I mostly buy my shoes online, especially from Myntra and Amazon,

The preposition 'from' is unnecessary before 'online'. Also, 'specially' should be 'especially' to indicate preference.

× because I get to know about the difference between price and on the other hand I am aware of my shoes size,

✓ because I get to know about the price differences and, on the other hand, I am aware of my shoe size,

The phrase 'difference between price' is incorrect; it should be 'price differences'. Also, 'shoes size' should be 'shoe size'. Commas are added for clarity.

× so I usually prefer to buy shoes for more.

✓ so I usually prefer to buy more shoes.

The phrase 'buy shoes for more' is incorrect. The correct order is 'buy more shoes' to indicate quantity.

× It depend on shoes.

✓ It depends on the shoes.

The verb 'depend' should be 'depends' to agree with singular subject 'It'. Also, 'shoes' should be preceded by 'the' for specificity.

× If I am going to buy sneakers, then I usually spend around ₹5000 uh,

✓ If I am going to buy sneakers, then I usually spend around ₹5000,

The sentence is acceptable but removing 'uh' improves clarity and fluency.

× then I usually spend around 2:00 to 3:00 K uh, depend on brand or if I'm buying.

✓ then I usually spend around ₹2000 to ₹3000, depending on the brand or what I'm buying.

The time format '2:00 to 3:00 K' is incorrect for money. It should be '₹2000 to ₹3000'. Also, 'depend' should be 'depending' to match the sentence structure.

× I always travel comfortable shoes because it is very important for me to be com be comfortable in anywhere

✓ I always prefer comfortable shoes because it is very important for me to be comfortable anywhere

The verb 'travel' is incorrectly used; 'prefer' fits better. 'Com be' is a typo and corrected to 'comfortable'. 'In anywhere' should be 'anywhere' without 'in'.

× comfortable is more important than fashion.

✓ comfort is more important than fashion.

'Comfortable' is an adjective; the noun 'comfort' should be used here to compare importance.

× If I am comfortable then I will do whatever. I'm bond in my comfort zone and comfortable is my first period.

✓ If I am comfortable, then I will do whatever. I'm bound in my comfort zone and comfort is my first priority.

'Bond' should be 'bound'. 'Comfortable' should be 'comfort' as a noun. 'First period' is incorrect; it should be 'first priority'.