Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

× Yes, I like umm, shopping, umm, all the streets, uh, especially umm, I love sneakers and I often I, I go, I buy them umm, at least once a year.

✓ Yes, I like shopping on all the streets, especially I love sneakers and I often go to buy them at least once a year.

The original sentence misuses 'shopping' without a preposition and has redundant phrases. 'Shopping' as a gerund requires a preposition like 'on' or 'in' to indicate location. Also, 'I often I, I go, I buy them' is repetitive and should be simplified to 'I often go to buy them'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I like umm, shopping, umm, all the streets, uh, especially umm, I love sneakers and I often I, I go, I buy them umm, at least once a year.

✓ Yes, I like shopping on all the streets, especially I love sneakers and I often go to buy them at least once a year.

The phrase 'shopping all the streets' lacks the necessary preposition 'on' to indicate location. Prepositions are essential to show relationships between actions and places. Adding 'on' before 'all the streets' corrects this error.

× Nor I haven't, I have not umm boarded umm shoes online umm 'cause I, I would like I, I needed to uh, fit the uh, with real estate, umm, online shopping, umm, sometimes uh, difficult to umm.

✓ No, I haven't bought shoes online because I would like to try them on in person. Online shopping is sometimes difficult for fitting.

The verb 'boarded' is incorrect here; the correct past participle of 'buy' is 'bought'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs simplification. 'Would like I, I needed to uh, fit' is incorrect; it should be 'would like to try them on'. This correction addresses the past tense and clarity issues.

× I don't know umm how much exactly how much I used to for for shopping, but I maybe I use the operator ¥5000 on buying shoes.

✓ I don't know exactly how much I usually spend on shopping, but maybe I spend around ¥5000 on buying shoes.

The phrase 'I use the operator ¥5000' is incorrect; 'use' is not appropriate for money spent. Instead, 'spend' should be used. Also, 'maybe I use the operator' is awkward and should be 'maybe I spend around'. This corrects the quantifier and verb usage related to money.

× Uh, definitely. I prefer comfortable shoes rather than, umm, fashionable, trendy, umm shoes because umm, when I umm, wear umm, fit shoes for me, for my my, for my, for me.

✓ Definitely, I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable, trendy shoes because when I wear shoes, they need to fit me well.

The original sentence has redundant and unclear phrases like 'for my my, for my, for me'. Also, 'when I wear fit shoes for me' is incorrect; it should be 'when I wear shoes, they need to fit me well'. This correction improves conjunction use and sentence clarity.