Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often because of my budget. I usually buy shoes only for special occasions, as they make me feel more confident and stylish.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy tránh lặp từ và nói rõ hơn về lý do bạn không mua giày online.

예시: I have never bought shoes online because my shoe size varies depending on the type. For instance, I choose bigger sizes for sports shoes but smaller ones for formal shoes, so I prefer trying them on in stores.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp thông tin cụ thể hơn.

예시: I usually spend about 3 to 4 million Vietnamese Dong on shoes each year, mostly during summer and New Year sales. On average, I buy around two pairs annually.

제안: Bạn nên sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh lặp từ và nói rõ hơn về lý do bạn thích giày thoải mái.

예시: I own both fashionable and comfortable shoes, but I always prefer comfortable ones like sports shoes because they are versatile. I can wear them not only at work but also when traveling around the country.

× Ah yes, all the girls love buying shoes, but to be honest, my financial ability doesn't allow me to buy a lot of shoes.

✓ Ah yes, all the girls love buying shoes, but to be honest, my financial ability doesn't allow me to buy many shoes.

The word 'a lot of' is generally used with countable plural nouns, but 'a lot of shoes' is acceptable. However, 'many shoes' is more appropriate in formal contexts when referring to countable items. The issue is minor but 'many' fits better here.

× I uh, it's just for a special occasions, uh, shoes.

✓ I uh, it's just for special occasions, uh, shoes.

The phrase 'a special occasions' is incorrect because 'a' is singular and 'occasions' is plural. The article 'a' should be removed to match the plural noun 'occasions'.

× The shoes make me feel much more confident and diverse.

✓ The shoes make me feel much more confident and different.

The adjective 'diverse' is not typically used to describe a person's feeling. 'Different' is more appropriate to express a change in feeling or appearance.

× For example, for sports shoes I always choose the big size and for the former shoe is small size.

✓ For example, for sports shoes I always choose the bigger size and for the former shoe, the smaller size.

The phrase 'the big size' should be 'the bigger size' to compare sizes. Also, 'former shoe is small size' is incorrect; it should be 'the former shoe, the smaller size' to be grammatically correct and clear.

× The average amount for shoes that I spend each year is about 3 or 4 million.

✓ The average amount I spend on shoes each year is about 3 or 4 million.

The phrase 'amount for shoes that I spend' is awkward. It is better to say 'amount I spend on shoes' to correctly express spending money on shoes.

× Vietnam Dong is from the summers and the New Year event.

✓ This money is spent during the summer and the New Year events.

The original sentence is unclear and lacks proper structure. It should clearly state when the money is spent, using 'during' and plural 'events' for clarity.

× Uh, so I in the average, I have UH-2 shoes each year.

✓ Uh, so on average, I buy 2 pairs of shoes each year.

The phrase 'I in the average' is incorrect; it should be 'on average'. Also, 'I have UH-2 shoes' is unclear; 'I buy 2 pairs of shoes' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I have both fashionable and comfortable shoes, but I prefer always buying comfortable shoes like sport shoes because they are quite versatile.

✓ I have both fashionable and comfortable shoes, but I always prefer buying comfortable shoes like sports shoes because they are quite versatile.

The adverb 'always' should be placed before the verb 'prefer' for correct adverb placement. Also, 'sport shoes' should be 'sports shoes'.

× I cannot only use that for workplace but also for traveling around the country for.

✓ I can not only use them for the workplace but also for traveling around the country.

'That' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'shoes'. 'Workplace' needs the definite article 'the'. The sentence ending 'for' is unnecessary and should be removed.