Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and make your sentences more concise. Also, add a linking phrase to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but only when I need a new pair because I prefer quality over quantity. Therefore, I don't like to own many shoes.

제안: Try to avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and complete your thoughts clearly. Also, be careful with grammar and plural forms.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because it is convenient and saves both time and energy. For example, I recently purchased a pair of sneakers online, and they fit me very well. Moreover, online shopping offers a wide variety of options.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use appropriate vocabulary like 'a lot of money' instead of 'a large money'. Also, use linking words to explain your opinion clearly.

예시: I usually spend a lot of money on shoes because I believe in quality over quantity. In fact, I think high-brand shoes are more comfortable and last longer than cheaper ones.

제안: Try to avoid hesitation and filler words. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast your preferences clearly. Also, complete your sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Honestly, it depends on the occasion. For work and casual outings, I prefer comfortable shoes; however, for special events or occasions, I definitely choose fashionable ones.

× I do not like to have, uh, many of, uh, shoes.

✓ I do not like to have, uh, many shoes.

The phrase 'many of shoes' is incorrect because 'many' should be directly followed by the plural noun without 'of' in this context. The correct form is 'many shoes'. This is a common plural usage error.

× Yes, many a times I bought shoes online because it is convenient for me as it saves time and energy both uh, recently I purchased a sneakers online and they fit me uh very well.

✓ Yes, many times I have bought shoes online because it is convenient for me as it saves time and energy. Recently, I purchased a pair of sneakers online and they fit me very well.

The phrase 'many a times' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'many times'. Also, the present perfect tense 'have bought' is appropriate here to indicate experience up to now. 'A sneakers' is incorrect because 'sneakers' is plural; it should be 'a pair of sneakers'. Additionally, the sentence was run-on and needed punctuation for clarity.

× I spent a large money whenever I'm going to buy shoes because I believe in quality over quantity.

✓ I spend a lot of money whenever I buy shoes because I believe in quality over quantity.

'A large money' is incorrect; 'money' is an uncountable noun and should be quantified with 'a lot of'. Also, the tense should be present simple 'spend' to match the habitual action indicated by 'whenever'. 'I'm going to buy' is incorrect here; 'I buy' is appropriate.

× Uh, I think, uh, the high brand shoes are more comfortable and lifelong, uh, than the, uh, cheaper ones.

✓ Uh, I think, uh, high-brand shoes are more comfortable and long-lasting than the cheaper ones.

'High brand' should be hyphenated as 'high-brand' to function as a compound adjective. 'Lifelong' is not appropriate to describe shoes; 'long-lasting' is the correct adjective. Also, unnecessary commas and fillers were removed for clarity.

× If it is for work and for casual outing, I opt for comfortable shoes over the fashionable one.

✓ If it is for work and for a casual outing, I opt for comfortable shoes over fashionable ones.

'Casual outing' needs an article 'a' because it is singular countable. 'Fashionable one' is singular, but 'shoes' is plural, so it should be 'fashionable ones' to match the plural noun 'shoes'.